Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Some people insist that a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens, and others assert that the well-being of the society can only be measured by the general welfare of its people. Admittedly, the overall success of society is important for a country’s development. Yet, the general welfare of every netizens are more crucial for a county’s future success.
Achieving overall success can help a country to develop its economy in faster paces. Take China as an example. To boost its economy, China has implemented a variety of tools of propaganda like mainstream movies and advertisements to mobilize its netizens to work together to promote the economic development. Although Chinese citizens are deprived of fundamental rights from the freedom of speech to the voting right, most Chinese are proud of their country and endeavor to contribute to the faster development of Chinese economy and larger volume of total GDP.
However, in order to go after the overall success of a nation, individual rights might be harmed. China is also a good example. Chinese government has issued a strong condemnation of protesters who stormed and vandalised the Hong Kong’s legislature, calling Hong Kong protest happened in June “totally intolerable”. This protest was to oppose the extradition bill, which permits arrangements for mutual legal assistance to be made between Hong Kong and any place outside Hong Kong. Hong Kong citizens are aware of the independent judiciary system being damaged. But mainland China claimed that this bill can further reduce officials’ corruption and boost the economy. With foreign mainstream newspapers like the Guardian and the New York Times being blocked in mainland China, the authoritarian country led by the Communist party ignore its citizens’ basic rights like the freedom of speech and the right to peaceably assemble.
When individual welfare of a country’s people is guaranteed, the country is more likely to develop quickly in long run. Take Sweden as an example. The country is known for gender equality, and the employment rate of women is one of the highest in the world according to the Pew Research Center. Thanks to the equality movement in Sweden, women in Sweden have more opportunities to go into elite college and step into workforce to create higher GDP for the country. Moreover, many women entrepreneurs prefer to start up business in Sweden because of the inclusive environment, which contribute a large amount of economic income for the country.
In a nutshell, overall success can only be beneficial for a country’s economy in short term, and the general welfare of citizens can bring economic benefits for an economy in longer term.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, so, well, as to, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32653061224 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00641792717 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519274376417 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1810368005 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.45 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.05 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313938817058 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917997038647 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17578234202 0.0758088955206 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202383111263 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218603703172 0.0667264976115 328% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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