Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
The author states that although innovations such as video, computers, and the internet offer schools improved methods for instructing students, they all too often distract from real learning. I strongly disagree with this statement because technological innovations have made instructing students easier by offering Microsoft Office, animations, Photoshop and CAD/CAM which help students to clearly understand a topic. Moreover, because of video, computers and the internet, various online video and audio tutorials became possible which created a whole new world for instructing students.
First, in classroom, teachers and other instructors use Powerpoint a lot, because it offers excellent presentation with numerous video and audio effects. Because of it, a complex topic can be explained very easily. For example, the working principle of a knitting machine may seem very difficult at first. But when the principle of a knitting machine is explained with an animation, it becomes very easy for the students.
Second, a student may miss any class due to sickness or other complication. Using technology, it became very easy to make video and audio tutorial. If an instructor makes a video tutorial of a particular topic, and upload it on the internet, the student can participate in the learning process even if he/she is not present in the school. For example, Khan Academy is doing the same thing for some years now. Because of Khan Academy, student from all around the world can learn anything from anywhere.
Some may argue that technological innovations are often distracting from real learning. Although at some degree it is true, the proper use of technology can eliminate this problem. For example, if a student uses smartphone during a class lecture, it will cause him difficulty to understand the class. Similarly, sometimes students use smartphone and computers excessively after the school which cause contradiction with their study schedule. But if smartphone use is banned in classroom and excessive usage of technology can be prevented after school, technology will do more good than anyone can ever imagine.
In conclusion, although innovations such as video, computers and the internet often distract from real learning, it creates far more opportunity in instructing students by offering superior presentation, animations, audio tutorial, video tutorial, and many more. For these reasons, technological innovations are improving the methods for instructing students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...learn anything from anywhere. Some may argue that technological innovations are ofte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56578947368 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96222173676 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536842105263 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4750330932 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.315789474 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455539864682 0.243740707755 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1412100487 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.184848448801 0.0758088955206 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272351030592 0.150359130593 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18980434259 0.0667264976115 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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