Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.Write a response in which you discuss the

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Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.

Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Charismatic leader undoubtedly play a crucial role in the all fields, regardless of business, politics, education or government. And a greater leader could guide team to a right direction even when majority of members lose the direction to the ultimate success path. However, all various spots might be involved with the leadership's glory for the team, such as corruption, misdemeanors, and so on. Those blemishes could tarnish the leader's positive image and even endanger the team's success path. Thus, someone prefer to adapt to an aggressive revitalization strategy for leadership in all of fields. From my perspective of view, such approach seems too permissive and obviously ignore the specifically diverse situation in the different field. A feasible way for us might be a case-by-case strategy, instead of blindly leveraging one unique revitalization method.

To start off, in politics, the major measurement for success is whether leaders could bring about well-being for the people served. And considering drawbacks of the long time reservation for political in a sedentary leader, it is wise for us to adapt to relatively frequent update of leadership. If carefully checking with the root cause of majority of obstacles for politics, the hidebound bureaucracies and lack of refreshment is a crucial reason which lead to ineffectiveness and dangers to all kinds of stains of leadership. From this perspective, every five years' renovation of leadership team could definitely influx new blood and naturally sweep away the inveterate flaws brought about by previous management team. American's presidential election and other country's regular election definitely is a case for that point, which guarantee the country's highest power away from potential issue caused by hackneyed interests.

Furthermore, when turning to education, the situation could change differently, as the success of education mainly relies on the educators' accumulative experience and whether a good strategy could be tested in a relatively long time, a frequently switching of leadership in education might lead to a detrimental effect. From this perspective, I can't agree both reason and claim for such issue. For campus and university, they mainly depends on the experienced leaders and their innovative method to apply for a long time. And five years seems too limited to check the actual effect, as both students and faculties could seldom practice and understand how actual effect look like.

Last but not least, as the business world might be even crazy than two cases mentioned above, I have to take a more conservative attitude for both reason and claim mentioned in the issue. Because business man's unique measurement is how to bring about profit for their company. From this perspective, either an neophyte or an experienced business man are on the same horizon. That is to say, as unrestricted by any existing rules in the business circle, an fledgling man could brazen to seek a seeming risky opportunity, which could give him/her tremendous revenue out of it. However, a more mature strategy to pursue with the judiciously well-proved approach might let doyens lose similar chance. Furthermore, all of those are actually irrelevant leadership renovation on the regular duration. Thus, it is unnecessary and also might feckless to adapt leadership update, in sight of business world.

In summary, as all fields have their own characteristics and requirement for seeking success, a too unsophisticated approach to do revitalization of leadership update every five years could become untenable. For drastically changing fields, such as business world, we might resort to a more flexible strategy to focus on the essential pursue goal. However, for more traditional fields, such as education, the adapted method of leadership should reflect its own long term characteristic and guarantee the effective approach could take practice and verify thoroughly. Furthermore, for fields which are easy bind with stain or mistake of their leadership, we are inclined to believe that regular update of leadership could be beneficial to some extent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 478, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teams'' or 'team's'?
Suggestion: teams'; team's
...rs positive image and even endanger the teams success path. Thus, someone prefer to a...
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Line 1, column 512, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...r the teams success path. Thus, someone prefer to adapt to an aggressive revitalizatio...
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Line 5, column 848, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'countrys the highest'.
Suggestion: countrys the highest
...ase for that point, which guarantee the countrys highest power away from potential issue caused ...
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Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mental effect. From this perspective, I cant agree both reason and claim for such is...
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Line 9, column 434, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
... For campus and university, they mainly depends on the experienced leaders and their in...
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Line 13, column 308, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... company. From this perspective, either an neophyte or an experienced business man...
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Line 13, column 454, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... existing rules in the business circle, an fledgling man could brazen to seek a se...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, thus, well, in summary, such as, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3501.0 2235.4752809 157% => OK
No of words: 643.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44479004666 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03561760524 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05146222705 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50233281493 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1097.1 704.065955056 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1761593455 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.666666667 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8148148148 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85185185185 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194016230038 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547141470185 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302967167804 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113358656253 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286251011752 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 173.0 100.480337079 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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