Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Doing what one love to do is better than choosing what one should do. While defending the claim made in the given task, certain reservations are pristine and obvious. The claim pits collective good achieved through the logical decision-making against the individualistic and emotional approach. The contrast in the claim is put forth by evaluating a conventional advice and suggesting a modification.
The key word in discussing the claim is "dream", whilst the meaning may vary for every individual-the ultimate objective behind using the word key is to denote the ambitious potential one exhibits while furthering a career in the field of choice. This particular trait of the conventional advice is beneficial for the psychological state of a person, as they are inherently happy to invest their time and resources in a field of choice rather than settling for goals established by someone else.
While being happy translate into an earlier and much more profound positive impact on society, the consequences of failing to do are the primary concern behind the claim. The claim exhibits reservation about judging ones potential to succeed. The claim is also based on the notion that the dreams of an individual are mostly selfish - that is derived from the individual's own necessities rather than augmenting the society. This reasoning is contrary to the fact that most of the individuals who indeed pursue a career in a field of choice have helped form the fabric of society more profoundly than those who chose to pick more logical career choices.
Most of the individuals who indeed end up furthering their career in the field of choice acquire more in-depth and critical knowledge as compared to those who do not. They are more inclined to further the field and add to the extant knowledge by making more invested contributions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dvice and suggesting a modification. The key word in discussing the claim is &ap...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...laim exhibits reservation about judging ones potential to succeed. The claim is also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 301.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16279069767 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99393419192 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2277628894 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.5 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125541794128 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435420721075 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293602098237 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071562715829 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297947390196 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.