Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Beginning from a naive child to an adult capable of taking decisions, everyone has their own wishes and dreams to pursue as a career. dreams could have changed due to varied perspective and the surroundings. From the second paragraph, it could be inferred that the dreams of an individual varies with age, peer group and the environment where they grow. A baby always tries to imitate his/ her parent. professions of a child's parents are motivating factors.
So, a nursery kid, when asked about the future, might answer with respect to their parent's profession, as kids always try to imitate their parents. At a high school level, boys are more prone to showcase their heroism and may like to become a policemen. On the other hand, girl's might be impressed with their teachers and hence could opt for that particular profession.At the college level, lads get interested in bike or car racing whereas girl are prone to cosmetics, fashion, etc.
India's expresident Dr. A.P.J Abdul Kaplan dreamed of a developed nation by the end of 2020. He often advised youngsters to dream a lot and accordingly live by it. it is a good point that passions are to be pursued but whether it will materialise or is it for a good cause, should be taken into account. According to the reason behind the claim, it is correctly mentioned that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. This is true because,what a person likes will be automatically reflected in his dream. when something is what a person likes, then surely it will be his own and hence selfish. Picking a worthy goal is vital than pursuing the dream. many people who felt independent to choose their own life are not successful. Best example could be individuals whose interest will be in music, photography, ...where the income is very less and hence could not afford a decent living. but it would have given them the freedom.
Thus, to conclude, it could be stated that, even though many people dream and advise to dream , it is very important to choose and implement a worthy goal capable of taking them to greater heights
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dreams
...ishes and dreams to pursue as a career. dreams could have changed due to varied perspe...
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Suggestion: Professions
...lways tries to imitate his/ her parent. professions of a childs parents are motivating fact...
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Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... childs parents are motivating factors. So, a nursery kid, when asked about the ...
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Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a policeman' or simply 'policemen'?
Suggestion: a policeman; policemen
...se their heroism and may like to become a policemen. On the other hand, girls might be impr...
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Suggestion: At
...ould opt for that particular profession.At the college level, lads get interested ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rl are prone to cosmetics, fashion, etc. Indias expresident Dr. A.P.J Abdul Kapl...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: J
...etc. Indias expresident Dr. A.P.J Abdul Kaplan dreamed of a developed nat...
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Suggestion: , what
...inherently selfish. This is true because,what a person likes will be automatically re...
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Suggestion: When
...e automatically reflected in his dream. when something is what a person likes, then ...
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Suggestion: Many
... goal is vital than pursuing the dream. many people who felt independent to choose t...
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Line 6, column 732, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Best'.
Suggestion: The Best
...oose their own life are not successful. Best example could be individuals whose inte...
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Suggestion: But
...hence could not afford a decent living. but it would have given them the freedom. ...
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Line 8, column 86, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dreaming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: dreaming
...ven though many people dream and advise to dream , it is very important to choose and im...
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Suggestion: ,
...gh many people dream and advise to dream , it is very important to choose and impl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...apable of taking them to greater heights
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, hence, if, may, second, so, then, thus, whereas, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81843575419 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61098937944 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597765363128 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1935864617 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7894736842 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154720881649 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494255184255 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574907806233 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950244478624 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689581786557 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.