Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
In this modern era of innovation and revolution, youths are the main directors of future. It is the young people on whom the world is relying on. Today's bright youths can make the future even glorious. But it comes to a big question while choosing career; what they should listen to: heart or mind? The claim avers that youths should follow goals that are 'worthy' and not choose anything from their dreams. As a reason of the claim, it says that people's dreams are selfish inherently. I disagree to this statement for three specific reasons.
Firstly, what does 'worthy' goals stand for? Is it only 'economical worth' or there should be mental peace inherent? 'Worth' is a relative thing in today's world. Some find themselves happy being in a small house and living life within budget income whereas, some are avarice and want more to earn. If a person is happy with choosing and chasing his own dream then they should follow their dreams. Dreams make a boy a man, in search of his dream, he grows up and tackles the world. If achieving worthy goals are the only measures of success, then mental state of youths can be harmed.
Secondly, dreams make people big and following dream can become extremely worthy if worth is measured by economical means. Mark Zuckerberg, founder of the most popular social networking site 'Facebook'; is a Harvard dropout, and also one of the youngest billionaires of the world. Continuation of academic study could have made his future bright, but not what he has become by following his own dreams. Same goes for Bill Gates, founder of 'Microsoft'. So letting young people follow their dreams can make remarkable changes in their lives as well as in the society.
Thirdly, not everyone's dream is selfish, and not everyone can be successful leaving their own interest and following some other paths. The world do not need only scientists, engineers and doctors. It needs musicians, athletes, actors-actresses as well. Some may say that if a youth's dream be being a smuggler, or a 'serial-killer' or anything harmful for humankind, then my reasons are not valid. But in that case, that young person has not been corrected, nobody showed him the correct path to think, to choose career. It's the duty of the society to teach children at their young age that what is wrong and what is right; what moral principles should he follow.
The big one dreams, the bigger he/she can be. Showing youth the right path and the correct moral principles and leaving them to choose their dream goal can make this world a happy place to live in as well as can make youths to be themselves.
Comments
Often, youngsters receive
Often, youngsters receive advices such as "follow your dreams" or "follow your heart" but every person is different and therefore their goals will be different.
It is very common in youngsters to pick unworthy goals with the plethora of options out in the real world. Without proper guidance if they are set free to do what they want, they might end up wasting time on unworthy things while they could have used that time to develop themselves in some other field which is right for them. So, it is quite significant for youngsters to seek advice of experienced people before picking out goals because they might not always have enough information to make a proper decision.
Once they are furnished with all the information, enough to think about the pros and cons in their field of interest, they can choose their dream otherwise they might end up in a field that is not right for them.
While this advice seems to be innocuous , in some cases it may have completely unexpected consequences. For example, if there is a person with a slight bullying attitude and if that person is told to follow his/her heart then he/she might end up hurting someone and eventually himself/herself. It would be wrong to go to a criminal minded person and ask him/her to follow his/her dreams, that would lead to some serious repercussions. Hence it is important to be aware of a person's state of mind, before injecting any ideas into his/her mind through advices.
Hence, in my view I agree to the saying , "Follow your dreams" but only after meticulous research about that dream.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 263, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'saith', 'says'.
Suggestion: saith; says
...tes, actors-actresses as well. Some may say that if a youths dream be being a smugg...
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Line 13, column 511, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to career'
Suggestion: to career
...im the correct path to think, to choose career. Its the duty of the society to teach c...
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Line 13, column 519, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...orrect path to think, to choose career. Its the duty of the society to teach childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, whereas, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77212389381 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43104750524 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511061946903 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7963264567 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8888888889 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7407407407 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14814814815 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201515718408 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591735954309 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584020809466 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123066896111 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370984239368 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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