Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. Write a response in which you discuss

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

While it is true that governments should ensure their major cities have sufficient funds due to many reasons, I disagree that one of the reasons is major cities is where a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
A nation’s major cities are usually the most developed area in the country, and it is also the case that those cities are the most globalized places compared to other cities. Globalization bring great ideas and cultures around the world to the major city, and it is also the reason why many people enojy living in major cities. However, it certainly does not help preserved the local culture of a nation since the city is mix with cultures from other part of the world. For example, Taipei is the capital of Taiwan and also the biggest city in the nation. If you ask a Taiwanese where you can find the best pork belly fried rice, the most popular traditional Taiwanese crusine, he or she would tell you to go to Tainan, a city in southern Taiwan. In Taipei you can find crusine from all over the world, however, it is unlikely you find the best traditional Taiwanese food in this city.
A major city also means that it is a place where businesses trive. People who live in the major city usually have business lives and work where they are required to be professional. For example, New York City is one of the biggest city in the United States, and if you walk around the city most people would dress in business professional outfit such as suits or dresses since this is what they are required to wear. However, in smaller cities where dress code are not required so strictly, it is possible that people can wear what they enjoy, hence starting a new trend or preference in the area. Therefore, in major city it is harder to generate culture such as in appeals.

Nevertheless, governments should still provide sufficient financial support for the major cities since more people live in major cities nowadays then smaller cities or rural areas. In conclusion, although governments should ensure the mojor cities have enough of funds due to reasons like there are more citizens living in these area, governments should not expect the major cities can preserve or generate a nation’s cultural tradition.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
While it is true that governments should...
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'brings'.
Suggestion: brings
...compared to other cities. Globalization bring great ideas and cultures around the wor...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... generate culture such as in appeals. Nevertheless, governments should still p...
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Line 6, column 324, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
... like there are more citizens living in these area, governments should not expect the majo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81701030928 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54710511106 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458762886598 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2992368767 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.5 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.21951772744 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351813758875 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142741298206 0.0831039109588 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731045915659 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255701163234 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614144806632 0.0667264976115 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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