Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Some may believe that it is pivotal for the major cities to get most of the funds from government allotment to flourish in all aspects. After all, they are the beholder of cultural heritages in most cases. Be that as it may, I presume, that along with the major cities, government should also pay equal, if not more, attention and importance to the other cities to develop. As it is not always the case that traditional and historic sites are situated in major cities alone, and that, it may lead to centralization of some cities while overlooking the rest.
First of all, not necessarily it has to be a major city- the cultural elements of a nation are generated and evolve around different cities, sometimes even in a very small one. In fact, different cities, localities have unique aspects of culture that is best practiced in that particular area. For example, indigenous community of Bangladesh like Chakma, Marma are based on hill tracts zone, in the southeast corner of the country. They are the most ignored part of the country in terms of development, communication and technological advances- ever since. As a consequence, the rich culture of those community is on the verge of extinction. Had the government given more importance to develop that region, they would have thrived.
Secondly, giving more concentration in developing major cities will result in growing a system that is very much centralized. More and more people will be attracted to the newly constructed fascilities and in turn, making it a congested one. Will then the main purpose of embracing and practicing a tradition serve? It would rather fail due to the lack of maintenance in a proper manner.
Moreover, sometimes, the claim must be refuted to save a region as rapid urbanization of major cities will threaten its existing resources. For example, in California, forests like Yosemite and Sierra-Nevada was almost on the way of destruction due to the growing demand of cities in this state. If the devastation kept going, then it would ultimately cause a great threat to its own community, let alone preserving its nature.
In essense, I disagree with the claim of the passage as it does not create substantial good impact in preserving a nations age long culture and heritage. However, clinging too much to the statement will cause to ignore the basic development of any city- which is also not supposed to be. A balanced and planned focus of developing and renovating all cities thorought the nation will help us to preserve our culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
Some may believe that it is pivotal for the major cities...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...her fail due to the lack of maintenance in a proper manner. Moreover, sometimes, the claim mus...
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Line 9, column 210, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ignoring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: ignoring
...ng too much to the statement will cause to ignore the basic development of any city- whic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, after all, as to, for example, in fact, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95774647887 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84798190017 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537558685446 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0694723272 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.6 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226440068685 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635817495992 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434997419059 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121742305467 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449750563563 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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