Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and suppo

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Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

In different times different measures of the success prevailed in society. What was considered successful in medieval times, might not be an indicator of success in our century. One trend remains constant -- the educated people usually are deemed as more successful than their uneducated counterparts. And educational institutions play a major role in equipping an individual with all the necessary skills, to ensure the further achievement in their chosen area. However, the role of universities is not limited just to give a knowledge, but to guide their students, suggesting them which subject to take to achieve the optimal performance and become competitive at the market. It is logical that the educational institutions should provide a form of advice to students which specialization to chose, after all, the alumni employment rate is one of the components affecting the popularity of university. However, I believe, that this consulting should refer to the student's chosen field of interest only, containing the information about schedule and curriculum he or she should follow to become a professional in the selected area. All other means of advising, like persuading a student to change his/her mind and select more "useful" specialization will have a deleterious impact on our society.

We all have different definitions of success. For some of us the success associates with high earnings and confidence in the next day, for others -- in achieving something new, discovering a new style in literature or art. Therefore, the universities cannot determine if the given student will be successful in this area or no just based on his/her aptitude or the external factors.

It is true that nowadays due to the high pace of technological progress and economical development, the preference on the job markets are given to STEM or financial/management majors. Therefore, the graduates of these specializations have better changes to get a highly-payed job rather than a student, majoring in arts. However, what happen if the universities start advising all their graduates to take STEM or financial majors? In quite a short period of time we will witness an overabundance of freshly graduated engineers and managers, fare exceeding the number of available vacancies. The result would be in increase in unemployment rates and the inability of those graduates to find their niche in volatile job market. On the other hands, the less lucrative positions as librarian or museum worker, might witness a high demand for graduates in corresponding fields. Therefore the imprudent policy of advising studying for lucrative majors will affect not only the future of graduates, but the popularity of universities itself.

The pursuing of the majority of students the STEM or other lucrative subjects, paradoxically, will also affect these lucrative areas as well. For example, the lack of professional artists will affect the ability to come up with harmonic and attractive design of building or a new gadget, making it less compelling for the ordinary buyer. As a result, the newly built building stays unpopulated, the sales of the gadget decreases and the companies' profits decrease. Therefore, seemingly less lucrative fields in fact can play a crucial role in the business.

In overall, it is not a business of the universities to decide if the pursuing field will bring the success for the student. The best that the universities can ensure is to provide students with a sufficient information and resources, necessary to become professional in their areas of interest.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 663, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...timal performance and become competitive at the market. It is logical that the ed...
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Line 1, column 983, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...ing should refer to the students chosen field of interest only, containig the informa...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...dent will be successful in this area or no just based on his/her aptitude or the e...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...high pace of technological progress and economical development, the preference on the job ...
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Line 5, column 450, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... or finanicial majors? In quite a short period of time we will witness an overabundance of fre...
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Line 5, column 875, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... for graduates in corresponding fields. Therefore the imprudent policy of advising studyi...
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Line 5, column 918, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[1]
Message: Verbs 'advise' and 'remind' are used with infinitive: 'to study'.
Suggestion: to study
...refore the imprudent policy of advising studying for lucrative majors will affect not on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, after all, for example, in fact, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3027.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3480565371 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18765205829 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508833922261 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 979.2 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5174747212 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.125 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980646516123 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280978447038 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297712495042 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0562783212176 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332405010172 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 100.480337079 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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