Essay topic 21: Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Society is made up of human community, cultural heritage, social conventions and norms, language, religion and other aspects that would collectively assist to understand the identity and values of a society. To understand a society, some people advocate that reference to heroes or role models would be helpful since citizens are inclined to attach the highest ideas to their heroes which indicate their culture and ideals as sources of inspiration or models to be replicated by next generations. However, heroes or role models may not be comprehensive paragons and people reflect their bias in their judgment; therefore, one must go beyond society’s heroes and role models’ features to understand the characteristics of that society. Probing ordinary people’ characteristics generally could be a good reference to understand a community.
To begin with, choosing random cases of heroes and role models would not reveal the real characteristics of a society since heroes and role models do not encompass all aspects of an ideal character. They typically reflect one outstanding characteristic. To illustrate this, let us consider the example of athletes like Rolando and Piquet that are well reputed for their athletic dexterities throughout not only their own country but also the world. These people are solely recognized as role models for being champions in international contests not for other features of the society such as art, tradition, lifestyles, etc. A similar example is the case of religious figures in a society that are considered as inviolable by majority of people while some people may have bias perspectives about the official religion of a society like Iranians who praise Islam harbingers and followers as ideals and role models.
Moreover, heroes may be polished by the authority to serve some political and ideological purposes which demonstrates a false image of the society. For instance, some philanthropists and celebrities as ideals of a community may join campaigns of corrupt politicians during the parliament elections to get citizens’ attention to disguise them as acceptable candidates to vote. Thus, such heroes could not help understand a society as most people do not approve such characteristics.
In conclusion, studying characteristics of ideals or heroes of a society would not provide a comprehensive perspective of the character of that society as they might have been chosen biasly by considering one feature such as championship, trophies, etc. Hence, all aspects of a society including religion, culture, lifestyles, etc must be scrutinized to gain a profound understanding of a society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53545232274 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26878498145 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511002444988 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.2869097325 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.714285714 118.986275619 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2142857143 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.21951772744 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0280617489076 0.243740707755 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0119052271526 0.0831039109588 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0157159961411 0.0758088955206 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.019310659559 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137582250303 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 48.8420337079 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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