Essay topic 9: People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People’s behavior has been studied over the years to determine whether internal or external forces drive their behavior. Some argue that human’s behavior is mainly influenced by external forces which is true in most cases due to societal expectations and circumstances. Individuals are taught how they should behave in various situations such as peer groups, professional settings, family environment, etc., however, internal forces occasionally override socially acceptable behaviors.
To begin with, the man’s action and behavior are shaped in consistent with the circumstances which he stands. There are some unwritten and adapted social norms and conventions which are accepted by people who endeavor to act in line with them. L lucid example which shed spotlights on this fact is to respect elderly in Iran. Children have to obey elderly to show respect even if their orderly’s ideas are false and against their children’s. This respect is rooted in the country’s beliefs. Respecting the seniors’ false opinions is solely for the sake of external factors of accepted norm of the circumstance.
In addition, some people modify their behavior as they are influenced by surroundings. Some people are rebellious and they act differently once they are surrounded by a body of well behaved people. To illustrate this, let us consider a rebellious individual at a party. He changes his behavior and observes the etiquettes and table manner to be compatible with the conditions he stands.
In contrary, strong enough internal forces determine people’s behavior regardless of their circumstances. Internal forces also cause people to behave irrationally. For instance, some people impulsively quit their job out of anger towards their bosses. People who suffer from psychological problems such as anxiety and depression avoid attending social settings and joining the coterie of their friends despite of a welcoming environment.
In conclusion, people’s behavior is conducted by their surroundings. However, internal forces such as psychological barriers can drive people’s behavior in some circumstances.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 318.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.83962264151 5.05705443957 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27505721517 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569182389937 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.092621298 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7368421053 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7368421053 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176438496548 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650917781894 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042747883399 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109200683627 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024089207004 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.3 12.1639044944 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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