Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Author’s claim “Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free”, in my opinion is valid as Formal education constrains the viewpoints of students and direct them to follow the path that will lead to successful life and job career. Following are the reasons for my accordance with the author.
Firstly, Formal education consists of examinations, homework, etc. in which student get whirled up. In formal education students is been taught to score good points or grades as to get good jobs and this very notion inhibits their minds and spirit to act freely. Instead of questioning every theory or hypothesis, students start to accept it as a fact. Formal education sometimes also inhibit the real learning process, as students in race to achieve good scores, rote up many topics that are very important in one’s life. In current scenario, the only goal of students has become is to get secure and good job so that they can live lavish life. This thought had hindered students to become knowledgeable. Thus, Schools or universities should educate students by instilling the curiosity among students, allow students to unravel the complex nature of world because these basic actions taken by schools or university will make them more practical and knowledgeable. Students will really start living their life and construing the surrounding around them.
Secondly, Thomas Edison, a scientists who have made more than thousand inventions had been dropout from schools. Through experiments he had able to achieve such success. Formal education taught students to learn from the mistakes of others and follow the path of successful person. It hobble students to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes and encourages to step in foots of successful person. There are many more examples which accords with author’s claim like Einstein, he was also dropout from school and castigated by many professors because of his poor performance in schools. But today we know him as a most intelligent person in the world. His brain is also kept for study. Making mistakes is as important as getting successful.
Thirdly, Formal education discourages students in taking risks in their life, they encourage them to follow smooth roads, but such notion have underestimated that the most successful person is the person who had taken many risks in his/her carrier. Risks is important factor in making oneself stand out from others and in achieving name and fame. Risks makes person audacious and allow him/her to unleash unknown, follow the path that had never been traveled. Consider an example, Bill gates, who is very well known for introducing Microsoft products. His father was a great lawyer and wanted his son to join law school. If Bill gates had not taken risks of going in computer science field, would he able to come up with Microsoft?
On wrapping up, Formal education had restrained students minds and spirit in order to make them successful, but there are many disadvantages in providing formal education as it squelch the curiosity behavior of students and also impede them to take risks in their life and learn from their mistakes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... start living their life and construing the surrounding around them. Secondly, Thomas Edison, a scientis...
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...round them. Secondly, Thomas Edison, a scientists who have made more than thousand invent...
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Suggestion: a thousand
...n, a scientists who have made more than thousand inventions had been dropout from school...
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Message: Did you mean 'hobbles'?
Suggestion: hobbles
...ollow the path of successful person. It hobble students to make mistakes and learn fro...
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Suggestion: stepping
... from their own mistakes and encourages to step in foots of successful person. There ar...
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...nd wanted his son to join law school. If Bill gates had not taken risks of going ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, as for, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 520.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16153846154 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67722146878 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505769230769 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.1818013514 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.230769231 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232981961052 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527727464093 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104098667933 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170838571489 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14333474765 0.0667264976115 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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