Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Why do i have to study subjects that aren't gonna help me in achieving what i want ? This question pops up in every student's mind sometime during school years as well as college years. Education is supposed to enlighten our minds. Although, In the middle of getting tired of the mundane routine, attending classes for completing the formal education we all become so apathetic to very notion of education itself. In spite of making us apathetic, formal education assists us in preparing for life outside the school where everybody has to perform the same task for the most part of the year in order to keep the boat afloat.

Formal education hinders our ability to be creative. It teaches us to to stick to the rules, pass courses, get a job and work like a slave. Most of the great thinkers, from Einstein to steve jobs, understood that to really make a difference in other people lives and free our mind we need to focus more on the things which we really want. The amount of load in gaining a formal education is so cumbersome that people tend to lose the sight of their predilections and spend most of the time in adjusting to the system of formal education.

What is the point of studying maths for a student who wants to be an artist? In the contemporary world, Formal education is a necessity for getting a job. But People who are actually skilled suffer if they do not have an formal education. There is no assurance that someone with a formal education has the skills , just having a fancy degree allows them to get a good job. Ulitmately, formal education may help , but we deprieve ourselves of true potential by relying on a degree and not championing people for their skills.

Our minds and spirit can be veraciously free when we are able to appreciate what we do. A sense of satisfaction is induced in people's mind when they are actually happy in doing their jobs. The efficiency of a person is automatically augmented and these people tend to contribute to society. But , for all this to happen the formal education system needs to be flexible enough to allow everyone to explore themselves.

Inspite of many improvements required in the current formal education system, it does offer everyone with equal opportunity to atleast meet their own needs and survive in these times but it restricts our ability to free our minds and spirits. Therefore all though formal education has merits but these merits do not outweigh the demerits of formal education.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, as to, as well as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76388888889 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6124286148 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0983438953 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285749487997 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898883222102 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597631856661 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172380858767 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345435589865 0.0667264976115 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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