The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
When we talk about the luxuries and comforts, which we have been blessed with in today and which our precedents could not enjoy, the first thing that strikes us is technology. Technology then and now are worlds apart. This has changed the lifestyle of people, introducing new benefits while at the same time throwing in more risks. Indeed, the comforts available to our generation have deprived us of being more independent and confident in ourselves.
It is beyond doubt that the use of technology is ubiquitous these days. People are using digital planners to organize events, setting reminders on their gadgets so that they are not forgetful, and even relying on technology to make decisions. Not only is this making people less efficient, but also making them more dependent on such technologies. These days the ‘smart’ devices are in vogue: ‘smart’ in the sense that they make the use of advanced and highly efficient machine learning algorithms to make the life of the person who uses it easier. Such a person can get suggestions from such devices in terms of what to eat, wear, what music to listen and a plethora of other things. Personal judgment has been pushed to the back of the mind by people using such technologies these days. Not relying on oneself even though the much sane inner voice forbids them from wearing a tawdry dress suggested by these intelligent devices is just one of the many ways we are assuming subservient roles in front of technology these days. Hence, we have compromised out self-reliance for technology.
Social media, which is so pervasive nowadays, is also a slow poison. While people love interacting with people across the globe in the luxury of their own homes, in real life they lose touch with reality and become more aloof. Such people become self-conscious and quail at meeting people face to face. Reports surface every day highlighting the high percentage of children losing their self-esteem and confidence due to this. Looking at people on social media sites with nearly perfect lives make people insecure. Not only social media, but a large number of online transactions taking place these days put the customer and his personal information at a very high risk of getting leaked. Frauds are reported every day by people suing fake companies online for swindling their money. Therefore, instead of making our lives easier, contemporary advancements are making us indulge in self-doubt, self-loathing and wary about our actions in the fear of being hoodwinked.
It does not go without saying that even though the luxuries have their share of disadvantages, they are so because of a reason. They have brought people closer, helped loved ones stay in touch, and have made it easy to provide help in exigent situations. Also, there are people who are able to organize their lives better using technology and have become more disciplined beings.
Nonetheless, luxuries and comforts today in terms of technology are riddled with more disadvantages than advantages. Humans being lazy by nature are fuelling this inborn trait even more by using them at the expense of their own good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...le insecure. Not only social media, but a large number of online transactions taking place these ...
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Line 9, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... them at the expense of their own good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 520.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07884615385 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7428167345 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6390763974 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.64 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103542670523 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304921441234 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331545641511 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591278429791 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272952318119 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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