The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether todays easy and convenient life abstain people from developing strongly or not. Indisputably, some people think that our ancestors were more stronger than us due to lack of comfort in their lives. Nevertheless, the availability of tools and gadgets has declined the futile efforts of people and rather makes them focus sharply on their tasks. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that the lack of conveniencies makes people more stronger and would rather argue that the life full of conveniencies makes people more stronger physically and mentally.
First of all, it is hard to imagine life without smartphones, laptops, internet and electricity. I would like to point out that these gadgets declines the efforts of people and save their precious time. To illustrate, let us look at an example of football world cup going on in Russia. With the availability of gadgets like smartphones and internet, people are just a click away from getting updated scores on their smartphones. Moreover, with the availability of wide amount of information on internet, scientists and researchers can focus more on their invention rather than extracting information from various sources like newspapers which they previously do. These conveniencies not only enhances their efforts but also provides them confidence to proceed further on their invention and thus develop them physically and mentally.
Furthermore, some people think that with the use of wide number of gadgets, people become lazy and dependent. They thought that ancient people are more stronger than us since they avoid using tools like calculator which they thought declines the efforts for thinking. Furthermore, these tools not only facilitates us to focus more on our tasks instead of doing trivial calculations. This not only enhances the mental ability of people and makes them avid about their tasks instead of doing boring repititive calculations. Thus with the ease of gadgets, people are becoming more stronger and can be able to finish a lot of works in few hours which ancient people took days to complete.
At last, the comfort and conveniency makes people free from trivial things. For example, if someone has a conference in any other country, then it just took some hours to go there using plane. Moreover, in every field whether its science or arts, history or geogrophy, movies or cultures, technology reduces the efforts of people for unnecessary things. For instance, through internet and television, we could get information about any place in the world. With the ease of automobiles, we can reach anyplace as soon as possible. Thus, technology helps people develop their thinking and hence, enhances their curiosity to develop more of it.
In conclusion, although some gadgets and tools makes people lazy and dependent, technology reduces the efforts of people and makes them more stronger physically and mentally. Thus, the luxuries and conveniencies makes people strong so that they can truely become strong individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...me people think that our ancestors were more stronger than us due to lack of comfort in their...
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Line 1, column 482, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
... the lack of conveniencies makes people more stronger and would rather argue that the life fu...
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Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...life full of conveniencies makes people more stronger physically and mentally. First of al...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...t. They thought that ancient people are more stronger than us since they avoid using tools li...
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Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f doing boring repititive calculations. Thus with the ease of gadgets, people are be...
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Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...he ease of gadgets, people are becoming more stronger and can be able to finish a lot of work...
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Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...es the efforts of people and makes them more stronger physically and mentally. Thus, the luxu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30658436214 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78022221358 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465020576132 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2133723021 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.130434783 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1304347826 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160208703477 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542362703864 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480513677731 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104917116649 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242197514273 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.