The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Luxuries and modern amenities have become basic necessities in today’s modern life-style. People belonging to every economic class work incessantly to afford greatest luxuries possible. Ostentatious nature of human beings is mainly responsible for this. Everyone wants to show the world what they are capable of. Also modern amenities and conveniences ease day-to-day life and save us from arduous tasks. On the other hand, these luxuries have stolen the capability of humans to perform their own task. Hence, I completely agree with the assertion that new inventions and luxurious items have prevented humans from developing into strong and independent beings.
In the present time, all types of luxuries and amenities that we can think of are disposable to humans. From a ceiling fan to multi-million villas with complete amenities, everything is a luxury. It depends on person’s economic conditions that how many facilities he can afford. These facilities have eased up our work to a great extent and provided us with highest levels of comfort and satisfaction. For example, a personal gym, swimming pool and discotheque are the luxuries that magnates can afford to have in their villas. These facilities help them in saving time and pain of going to different places like gym and pool. Luxuries, from most basic to most extravagant are meant for our convenience and facility.
But, along with providing highest levels of comfort, these luxuries deprive us from our own development. Advancement in technology and machinery has ceased human brain development. Though humans are the makers of all these machines, today we have become slaves to them. We cannot pass a single day without use of any electronic or luxurious item. For instance, electronic gadgets have thwarted our mental development. With the increasing use or mobile phone and other such conveniences, we have ceased using our own intellect in most cases. People have stopped going out into the wilderness to experience thrill and adventure and rather prefer to stay in their luxurious apartment in front of TV on a comfortable couch and have vicarious pleasure. Lack of excitement and zest for life due to mundane, monotonous life and less activity has also led to various mental and physical health problems.
At last, only through having perfect equilibrium and moderate use of required conveniences can we lead a healthy and sanguine life. Hence, proper understanding of all realms of life is necessary to set this balance. Despite of all the luxuries and amenities available it is necessary to grow as a strong and independent individual.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...xuries and modern amenities have become basic necessities in today's modern life-style. Peop...
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Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'afford the greatest'.
Suggestion: afford the greatest
...very economic class work incessantly to afford greatest luxuries possible. Ostentatious nature ...
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Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...how the world what they are capable of. Also modern amenities and conveniences ease ...
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Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
... work to a great extent and provided us with highest levels of comfort and satisfaction. For...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'providing the highest'.
Suggestion: providing the highest
...nience and facility. But, along with providing highest levels of comfort, these luxuries depri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, in most cases, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27923627685 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88758357117 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563245823389 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7411026904 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.48 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218005252538 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561691959508 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656933728266 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142800177724 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732485371102 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.