The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
According to the author, modern life does not allow people to become independent and strong. More precisely, the author mentions “luxuries and conveniences” as the main responsible for not developing a strong and independent personality. However, it is hard to understand what this expression means unless we consider particular examples. In what follows I will reject the author position by taking into account different cases.
First, social life has been strongly changed in last years at least in the West. There are two main aspects that strike. First, society is more complex: every single person somehow depends on other one. For example, most of us are not able to fix a problem of a pipe of the bathroom and, therefore, it is necessary to call a plumber; the majority of people is not able to make the food they eat and, as a result, they go to the market. Second, our social life features an intensive use of technological devices. For instance, smartphones and computer enables us to constantly communicate to each other through social media; in order to arrive at an unknown place, we exploit the navigator of cars.
Even though these examples seem to prove that modern life avoids people from being independent, it is important to consider the other side of the coin. It is true that, by being dependent on other people or technological devices, we are apparently less indipendent. Yet, such a dependence permits us to have more free time. If we call a plumber, we do not deal with pipes; if we do not deal with pipes, we can spend our time in a different way – in the way in which we think is the best. Therefore, it seems that people were less independent in the past than we are at present time: the impossibility of delegating someone was detrimental to free time and independence.
But there are other facts that seem to prove that we are more independent. For example, the level of education is higher than it used to be. This means that more people are less inclined not to develop their own opinion. Moreover, democracy is the more popular system for organizing society and democracy is the system in which the greatest number of people are freer.
In conclusion, the author’s position is questionable. Even though we rely on technology and other people, this permits us to have more free time and to be more independent. The popularity of democracy and an higher level of education confirm this expansion of our independence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86966824645 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88773123953 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504739336493 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.766880951 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4090909091 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1818181818 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112835690347 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328737234357 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418710092562 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0642815593857 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477921789532 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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