The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
With today’s technology, everything comes with easy access. From cars, to microwaves, to the internet, we can get what we want almost immediately. Instant gratification has developed into a lack of effort for us humans to get what we want. On the other hand, we have more time on our hands to make progress in other areas that need it.
To agree with the statement, we have become totally dependent on the technologies that make life less time-consuming. Our dependency on the internet, microwaves, cars, and so on, have kept us from being able to do things on our own. In illustration, the internet is a way of quick and easy communication, we have developed a fear or disability to be able to have true conversations with people face-to-face, or even leave a voicemail on the phone. We have gotten into the habit of texting or emailing when there is something that needs to be discussed. On the contrary, texting and emailing is more time conserving than physically going to the person to talk to them, leading to the next point.
In disagreement with the statement, the luxuries and conveniences of today save people time and make them more independent. For example, many years ago, women were expected to spend their entire day homeschooling the kids and slaving in the kitchen to prepare meals. Microwaves have cut down on time needed for preparing a meal, cars make it easier to get the children to a school, and these time-saving things make it more possible for women to further their education and have jobs that make them more independent and more respected in society. Women are no longer expected to be housewives, but they now can better themselves and earn respect in society as they become doctors, lawyers, or whatever they wish to be.
To close, today’s technology gives the luxury and convenience of less wasted time and gives people the potential to be independent and successful. With the earlier examples, the statement does not strongly hold true and my position is shaped by the time-saving aspect that allows people to improve and respect themselves.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 354.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9209039548 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92032471936 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536723163842 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4031210074 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.133333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110197970454 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454863293484 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436467780733 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761282046355 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030945209187 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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