The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Understanding the Human mind can be related to swaying the bird's nest. Most people tend to run towards filling their pocket by doing the highest paying jobs or invest in the business to amulet successful people and attain luxuries belongings. Despite having these some go far belong this concept of self-complacent and live for the society.
One such example is the World's richest person, Bill Gates. After leaving himself as Chief Executing Officer at Microsoft.Inc he becomes interested in the curation of deadly disease and welfare of the poor nations. He joined hands with his dearest wife and founded the Organisation called Melinda Gates foundation which helped in eradicating deadly diseases in many developing countries. For instance, his mission to make India polio-free started in 2001 and was accomplished in 2010. since then, India received zero patients for Polio and his collaboration with the local government proved to be an effective step in the supplying the necessary vaccinations. According to Wikipedia, he has more than $80 Billion. He has already lived a luxurious life but steps forward from his comfort zone to live the poor and vaccine depriving nations. It also shows that wealthy people can open the door that was hidden from middle class individual.
Another great example is the Olympic gold medalist, Abhinav bindra. He is a son of Indian industrialist, belonging to a rich family who won a Gold medal in 2008 Beijing Olympic in the free-range shooting. He was engaged in the sports since the age of 13, participating in the shooting events at state and national levels. His family supported him in his vision for participating in the Olympics and his determination made his vision into reality. Despite of having a luxury of joining his family business he took a stand of living his dream that truly made him independent. Instead of being prevented by the comfort of the lavishness that most people would, he managed to look the other way around and seek the path to his successful life.
It is also true that elegance provided by the family can be destructive yet there many people who tried overcome the desire of being in their comfort zone and succeed in their path of being successful on their own terms. My mother belongs to a sumptuous family and after her school graduation, joined his family business of textile industry as a Quantity manager but quit her job within six months of joining. She wanted to study management that was uncommon in the era of 1980s in India when women were abolished from continuing education at the university level. Her passion drove her to pursue a degree in management both at the bachelor and master level. Currently, she is working mother of two kids with designation as head SAP consultant at Delloite. The decisions made by her in her career path make her strong and dependent woman and inspire others to follow their own path with dignity.
In conclusion, it can be said from the examples that elegant, wealth and luxurious lifestyle can not block one's perspective about their career path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 515.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9786407767 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70826386917 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566990291262 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0473737746 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.833333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4583333333 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111749839323 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0282664726892 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379937397878 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0628335074026 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161851084546 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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