A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous

Every individual is born with unique capabilities. Had Beyonce focussed more of her time and energy in playing football rather than music, there is a greater probability that nobody in this world knew about her. Thus, it is always better to work upon one's strong areas right from a very early age. A student should be given the flexibility to decide his curriculum even in secondary school.

Firstly, every individual performs better in a field of his own interest. Students have enough time in their secondary school years to decide upon their interests. Now, for example if Albert Einstein was forced to study politics in which he had least interest, obviously he would not have scored well. Thus he would have been declared as an average child with no special abilities. But since he had great interest in laws of nature or Physics, he instead focussed on developing his brain in that direction right from the time he was a child. Thus, putting hands into anything in which one is not interested is a sheer waste of talent and energy.

Furthermore, focussing on particular area right from the early age gives children more time to delve into the depth of the subject and learn more and more. This reminds me of Sam who loved Mathematics and had spent extra time learning concepts which were not taught in the chool. Now, when he entered into the college for Bachelors degree in Mathematics, he stood way ahead of his peers in terms of knowledge. He was quick in grasping new concepts too.

Finally, students have to pay a lot of money for the unnecessary subjects which won't bring them much gains in their future. Now imagine the case of a student coming from a family who is not much financially sound. He might not be able to spend much money on specialisations i.e. higher study beacuse much of their money has already been spent. Had it been the case where he chose only the desired subjects, he would still have much more resources to continue studying higher in the feild of his interest. On the contrary, it might be possible that a students do not know much about their field of interest. So in that case it is better to study the fixed common curriculum. But such cases are rare. Instead, secondary school should design its curriculum such that each student gets time to know more about his feild of interest.

Thus all the points stated above underscore the importance of students being given the choice to decide their curriculum way before their college years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'had the least'.
Suggestion: had the least
...as forced to study politics in which he had least interest, obviously he would not have s...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...bviously he would not have scored well. Thus he would have been declared as an avera...
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Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ecessary subjects which wont bring them much gains in their future. Now imagine the ...
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Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...the contrary, it might be possible that a students do not know much about their field of i...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ow more about his feild of interest. Thus all the points stated above underscore ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, still, thus, well, as for, for example, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74595842956 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44256654902 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535796766744 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9546777514 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.347826087 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100352314933 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033002637679 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301172941992 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0582954291656 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167604687244 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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