People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
It is said that the behavior of people is determined by external factors that are out of their control, and they do not have any role in making them. I agree with this statement.
Behaviour is a trait of the personality of an individual. It is how a person reacts to the given situation. People have different behavior, and this is what differentiates them from each other. The behavior of people can be influenced by genetic and external factors. Genetic factors including the demeanors that are transmitted from the parents, and external factors such as the environment in which a person is placed or people who the person communicates with. All of these factors can affect the behavior of an individual differently.
First, we start with the parents and the childhood period. Parents are the first individuals whom children are familiarized with. Home is the first place in which children are acculturated, and they are taught about different manners. Therefore, parents have the most important role in the shaping of behavior in children. We can see that our personalities today are a reflection of what we have faced in their childhood. For example, if a person had a family with strong morals and balanced manners in his/her childhood, now he/she would have better and calm behavior in front of others. By contrast, a person in a family with aggressive demeanors would have antisocial behavior in his/her adulthood. In this case, the behavior of individuals is shaped by their family, and they do not have any role in this issue.
The second factor is peer pressure on individuals in their adolescent period. This factor is every parent's fear because in this period people are influenced by their friends, and they tend to fall into the line with them. Most people believe that if a person communicates with negative individuals, after a while their behavior will surely show up in his/her character. Their behavior becomes a part of his/her personality.
The third factor is the environment in which people are influenced by different external factors such as individuals, economic and social conditions and something like them. The best example for this factor is the manager of Pepsi company who was in a traditional family in the south of India but because of the supports and opportunities that she received from her environment, she turned into a successful person with a dynamic personality.
The final factor is genetic factors that can be inherited from parents. Some manners are instinctive and they are transmitted from the parents. For example, to be kind or stingy can be transmitted from parents to children.
In conclusion, I believed that the behavior of a person can be influenced by different external and internal factors that are out of control of his / her. Nevertheless, sometimes people can choose which behavior is suitable for them and reinforce it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06276150628 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88289097257 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422594142259 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6542674366 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6296296296 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153961397975 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535749702153 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552551951186 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963268684932 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064190275379 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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