People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The issue of whether people’s behavior is largely determined by forces is a contentious one. While each side has its strengths and weaknesses, I believe that this argument is unwarranted because of numerous reasons. Primarily, even if people are affected by the same forces, they may have different behavioral attributes. Additionally, forces are temporary factors, while behaviors are constituents of character which is persistent.
First of all, behavior of an individual is his own making as he is the decision maker for actions in any cases. Moreover, both common sense and personal experience told us that the same forces can have different impacts on people, because people’s way of thinking is the distinguishing factor. To illustrate, let us look at the example of Joe & Zoe twin brothers. Although they have grown in the same happy family, Joe has a lot more aggressive attitude than Zoe. When they had a car accident last year, Joe started to lambast his mother who was the driver, while Zoe tried to calm her. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that behaviors of a person cannot be determined by environmental forces.
Secondly, directing the behavior of a human requires changing one’s way of thinking which is impossible to do by force. By the way, I would like to point out that all of our behaviors are product of our mind. Joseph Harper, for example, commander of U.S. army in World War II, was prisoner in late 1900’s, and enemy soldiers have tortured, threat him to learn about U.S. army’s plan, but he did not give any information as he was a fearless person. Hence, all the evidence above demonstrates that changing one’s act by using force is an invalid claim.
Admittedly, some may argue that people’s attitude is determined by environmental circumstances. This is true especially when it comes to extreme cases like Tarzan who has grown up in jungle. In addition, if the force has a negative impact on the individual, it may result in traumatic way. Susan Andrew, for instance, a 15 years old cheerful girl, has been abused by her father for two months. Even though she got treatment from a well-known hospital for a year, she did not become as lively as in the past. However, the above argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that every force has an impact on our behaviors, because this case was one of the extreme cases as it caused a psychological destruction.
In conclusion, although there could be some unusual cases in which forces have an effect on person’s behaviors, we cannot generalize it, because not all forces have a traumatic impact on one’s psychology. In fact, as long as people protect their way of thinking, none of the forces will be able to determine their behaviors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, by the way, first of all, in any case
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0150862069 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97641245493 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.10617977528 419% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5021568829 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.772727273 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22727272727 5.21951772744 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314986525497 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911736609694 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10629073432 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182854766122 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796436972426 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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