Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Technology is advancing at a pace that has never been seen before in the entire history of mankind. This technological advancement would have been impossible without the inquisitive minds in our society-namely, Scientist and reasearchers. The author of the statement proposes that Scientists and researchers should focus their research on areas that would benefit the maximum number of populous. I agree that many heads working at solving a problem that troubles many would be beneficial to us as a society. However, there is an underlying assumption to which I differ.
Let us consider the example of deadly virus- Variola, also known as Smallpox. This deadly virus, once, wreaked havoc on many communities around the world and killed millions of children and adults. Despite being highly contagious, many field researcher went into these communities to collect samples of various strains of the virus. After working day and night, they eventually found the vaccine to cure the disease, and thus, eradicating the smallpox from the face of the earth. This example shows us how the scientific community works. Hundreds of researchers and scientists, from all over the world, came together and worked for days to solve a problem that had threatened the mankind for thousands of years. The point is, that we can certainly solve many of our current problems, if the scientific community focused their efforts into finding a solution. There are certainly many more examples, where the scientific community concentrated their efforts into solving many of the complex problems.
Many people argue that scientific communities focus on areas such as Space exploration other areas is of no use, since it does not have any tangible use for common man. However, I would argue that, this simply not true. Let us consider an example. We have used, or at least heard of, Velcro. This Velcro is now so common, that we use it in our day to day life. What many do not know that Velcro is product created at NASA for their experiments. Different fields have different problems, but many times the solution to these seemingly indistinguishable problems are similar in nature. The above examples intends to poke at that very point. In essence, there are cases where strict adherence to the statement would hinder the progress of technology and ultimately us as a society.
The gist is that, It would certainly benefit us if the scientific community put more focused efforts to solve the problems of our society. But it would be foolish to assume that research in areas other than those, which directly affect our lives, is of no use. Any advancement in science and technology is ultimately aimed at solving our problems,however trivial or complex they may be.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 604, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'intend'.
Suggestion: intend
...e similar in nature. The above examples intends to poke at that very point. In essence,...
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Line 7, column 347, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , however
...ultimately aimed at solving our problems,however trivial or complex they may be.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, at least, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09756097561 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79451650047 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521064301552 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0019809057 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.96 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.04 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.24 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1174651065 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348055542724 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653703204486 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890659317678 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549079759367 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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