Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
corporations are artificial enitities made by humnas with the motive of making profits, which translates mainly to money. These entities allow such profit generation through the collaberation of the resources, man power and, more importantly, ambition. At present, one sees hiw the CEOs of the corporations hound behind profits , competeing with their rivals. this is, intuitive, given that their main purpose is satisfying the shareholders by giving the rewards that they risked for through investment. this may very well be the underlying argument for the claim that corporations should, abiding by the law, make their sole responsibility to much as money as possible. Though in a total monetory and narrow perspective this is true, it is rife with patches in the perspective of ethics, sutainability and suprisingly, economically. corporations that make making money their only responsibility are bound to recieve backlash from the society, governments, and ultimately from the market itself making their sole purpose rendering moot. it is due with this argument that I feel akin tothe claim that corporations should promote well being of the societies and the environments they operate in, besides pursuing monetary gains.
employees of a given corporation comes, more often than not, from the same society tat the corporation works in. thus, a corporation promoting the well being of the society would be more likely to actually engage in the harnessing and nourishing the current and the potential human resource of that corporation. In this sense, it would be an investment rather than a cost. When looking from the perspecticve from the society, one would more likely to be a employee of a company that ones sees as an ethical, caring and responsible one, rather than for a company that seems to pursue only money, which are more likely to turn a blind eye on the employee welfare. thus a company promoting social well being would achieve monetary gains in the long run.
People are now more than ever concious about the climate changes that are happening. Even the most skeptics of the climate change are now rethinking their alternative hypothesis. Contemperory society have more progressive ideas, and it is only natural that they would favour the corporations that support and share similar idealogies. thus it would be more likely that a company that have environment friendly campaing to gain more public trust, and hence more market share. large market share translates to monetary gains, which a company that turns a blind eye towards environmental responsibiity would not get.
The cultures around the worls are changing, so are the corporate cultures. The claim that "pursue money, you will get rich"would have been a golden rule few decades back, but now with the more progressive generations taking over the market, the strategies and the rules of the game of the corporations should change too. If they fail to adapt to thess changes, they are bound to loose, that is they will loose the monetary interests they dearly pursue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, well, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22718052738 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87395002552 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515212981744 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4856653098 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.714285714 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4761904762 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251819933823 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745354984979 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061874123038 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147525725255 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391278994577 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.