Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The topic raises a controversial issue on whether a society must put its own success before the well being of its individual citizens or not. What I believe is, society is comprised of many individuals and it prospers only when people comprised of it prospers. Society cannot advance by leaving the people behind.
First of all, when society focuses on all the individuals comprised of it, the success rate is high. I would like to point out that a country with all the people above poverty line is way better than the society comprised of some people extreme rich and others below poverty line. To illustrate this let us take an example of a country where the government is just focusing on already developed cities and care very less about the rural areas. In this case, people in rural areas do not have a good education or healthcare facilities. When this kind of situation occurs, the country in itself might have some developed cities to brag about to the world but overall growth of the country is negative. Consequently, it is obvious that a country should focus on all the regions, be it rural or urban.
Furthermore, When the society starts partiality between its people, favoring some part over others, it would be deleterious to the society in the long run. Specifically, when the country starts depriving basic felicity like education to some part of it, the generation start becoming illiterate, which decreases the GDP of the country, resulting in overall downfall of the country. Both common sense and personal experience has told us that the country should look after all of its people to achieve overall growth.
Admittedly, some might choose high standard deviation in the income of its people so that there are more magnates in the country. This is true specifically when someone wants to brag about this to other people and hide the truth of most of the population comprised in it. In contrary, I believe in more than average income for all the people, so that the society can flourish together. In addition, just to brag doesn't give a reason to some people to believe that a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens.
In conclusion, although some people believe in bragging and thus think that society should not consider its individual citizens while achieving success, this is impossible, as society can only achieve success when they are concerned about the well being of its individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, well, while, after all, as to, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92105263158 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61448668462 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483253588517 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6946213782 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.21951772744 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489365588997 0.243740707755 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170608590872 0.0831039109588 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154112955978 0.0758088955206 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328257042967 0.150359130593 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11837726016 0.0667264976115 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6
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