Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Stating that some a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens in order to thrive, this view asserts that happiness of general people is less weight than success of a society. In some senses, it is true that because there are many diverse people in a society, considering all people can be an obstacle for thrive of a society. In my point of view, however, considering historical examples and general thought of a society, we cannot say that only overall success of a society could not be a real thriving
Of course, few would disagree that sacrifice of general people is indispensable with thriving of a society. When it comes to development of capitalism and industrial revolution, although general people were hard because of tremendous amount of working, the economic size and GDP increasingly exploded. For example, as we can see many historical records and literature, many people suffered from hard working and long work time. However, nations, especially Western nations which grilled workers could proceed Eastern and Middle Nations, and these gave chance dominate all world. This shows that with only ignoring request of general people, our society can be greater than before.
However, can we always say that general citizens are ignoble? My answer is no. Considering that there are many historical examples which general people revolutionized whole society because of low quality of life, famine, dissatisfaction for government, it is better to respect opinion of people for ultimate development of a society. For example, Jin dynasty in Chinese history, government overly exploited people's work force and women to make emperor satisfactory. But after few years, the nation was conquered by rebels. This shows that why happiness of general people could be important.
Moreover, considering that, in war, people who fight against enemy is general people not but officers or abundant people, if people are not satisfactory or, even, having dissatisfaction to their own society, no one could have loyalty for the country or will to fight against enemy, it could make a country which don't consider general people's well being a colony of other nations. These shows that there is another thing to think when we are talking about thriving of a society.
To summarize, many people would agree that we can achieve thriving of a society without considering life of general people. However, considering importance of people's happiness in history and crisis of a society, only foolish people would agree that overall success is necessary-sufficient condition of thriving of a society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, another thing, for example, of course, talking about, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26303317536 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84747070941 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492890995261 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.8771176866 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.647058824 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8235294118 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336884907806 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111064107596 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121206091647 0.0758088955206 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206050989774 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126128636396 0.0667264976115 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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