All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Stating that all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's school, this view asserts that the effort of parents is key roles to their children's education. In some senses, it is true that their interest in their kids related to the success of the education. In my point, however, regarding side effect of the excessive interest and raising students as a dependent adult, the attention of them is peripheral for successful
Of course, few would disagree that parents' the amount of spent time in the education would be a necessary cause that decides the achievement of studying. The statistical data show that the higher amount of income is, the more time is spent on children's education and the more possibility that their descendants go to better colleges increase. This implies that the parents' painstaking breed is important for children's growth.
Nonetheless, can we say that their concerns about education are always beneficial to their children? My answer is no. The excessive attention to children's scholarly achievement is harmful. For example, in Korea, the point of view that considering grade is the most valuable thing is pervasive in schools and parents. So, students in Korea are stressed and depressed by their credits. Even, few of them killed themselves because of severe criticism from their parents. The point is that attention could be noxious for children's life and mental health.
Moreover, little attention could be better to develop the children as 'a dependent individual' who can solve their problems by themselves. To maximize the effect of education, parents offer their children the convenience such as picking up from the schools and extra curriculum academies, doing their hard homework instead. These make the children dependent on their parents more and more. Even if they become adult age, they will not resolve their problems without discussing with their parents.
To sum, it is undeniable that interest in education would important factor to successful education. Considering the effect of excessive attention and breeding up children as an independent person, the attention could not be always helpful for the children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, nonetheless, regarding, so, for example, of course, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30547550432 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75443423508 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495677233429 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.3211648991 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.277777778 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36015280905 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112135896403 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118468614643 0.0758088955206 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205260222223 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945583937584 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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