A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this memo, the author claims that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be popular and profitable. To support her claim, she cited a recent sales study that consumption of seafood has increased by 30% in Bay City restaurants and points out that there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Also, she assumes that the fact that the major type of families in the city is the two-income family is the cause for high profit and popularity. Careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has several logical flaws.
To begin with, she hastily assumes that the high consumption of seafood will maintain in the future. The previous tendency of consumption could be a unique phenomenon in the city. For example, the residents of the city didn't like fishes or seaweed in the past. After a TV program which tells the good effect of the seafood, people have liked the seafood. However, the favor could be temporary. If this is true, we cannot be convinced by this argument.
Second, based on the nationwide search about the major traits of the two-income family, the author assumes that the two-income families in the city are same as families in the out of the city. There is a possibility that even if the common two-income families like healthy food and are few home cooker, the two-income families in Bay City could like junk food more than slow dishes or like cooking in the home. If she cannot present us a specified survey about the character of the two-income families in the cities, this argument will still not persuasive.
Finally, Even if we admit other problems are true, there remains a critical problem. There is no a guarantee that likeness of the healthy food and dining out is not followed by higher consumption of seafood. For example, the household in the city would like to eat vegetable food than fishes, or even, the families in the city would go to other cities to dine out in more high-quality seafood restaurants.
In conclusion, this argument is dubious as it stands. To make this argument more proper, the author has to show us a specified survey that indicated similarity between two-income families in the Bay City and nationwide the families and has to explain why she thinks the popularity of seafood will not change in the future. To evaluate better, she must explain why she thinks the high ratio of two-income families could be a cause of the high consumption of seafood
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- suppose the high consumption of seafood will maintain in the future, how to argue?
argument 2 and argument 3 -- should be argued together
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 1995 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.716 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.54 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sumption of seafood has increased by 30% in Bay City restaurants and points out t...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... For example, the residents of the city didnt like fishes or seaweed in the past. Aft...
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Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his argument will still not persuasive. Finally, Even if we admit other problems...
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Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e remains a critical problem. There is no a guarantee that likeness of the health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, second, so, still, as to, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85781990521 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60709603852 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4336492891 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7899947868 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.894736842 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269934040114 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869264504808 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128384428519 0.0701772020484 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168921847296 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13085417317 0.0628817314937 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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