Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Whether or not to preserve a wilderness area that is posed in a nation has been debated back and forth since the discovery of these beautiful areas. Preserving such areas would greatly cut down on animal and plant life extinction, but if they were developed for economic growth it would have a positive impact on the nation’s economy which can positively impact all of the nation’s residents. The wilderness areas should be developed for potential economic gain because it will allow the area to receive money that it otherwise shouldn’t while allowing the nation’s residents to safely see these areas. On the other hand, if these areas did become developed then it could greatly negatively impact the plant and animal life in these areas.
When wilderness areas are developed in order to develop an economic gain, Americans first begin to think of its many national parks such as the Grand Canyon, Yellowstone, and Yosemite, among others. These are very popular national parks that are visited by millions each year. The national parks do charge for entrance into them and also some hold small gift shops where park goers can purchase memorabilia. If these areas were not developed it would mean that there would be no charge to gain entrance or the small gift shops that create memories for many families.
Not only if the wilderness areas in a national were developed it would promote a monetary gain, but it would also create a safer environment for park-goers to attend. For example, think of the Grand Canyon- a magnificent canyon that can kill someone if they were to fall over the edge. Luckily, since park developers have seen this, they have put in place large bars that keep park-goers from getting too close to the edge and risking their lives. The same can be said for Yellowstone National park; there are various signs posted that say to not engage in the wildlife there because the animals could hurt an individual. If a park were not developed these warning signs would not be posted for viewers to see and follow.
Developing a wilderness area does have the upsides of monetary gain along with creating a safe environment for its residents, but it does disturb the wildlife that lives there. Animals would not like to be run out of their home just so people can come view the beautiful scenery. Would humans like their home to be disturbed so others can see into their homes? It not only disrupts the animals’ lives but also the plant life at these parks. Trees and bushes are cut down in order to create a path for humans to walk on. Disrupting the wildlife at these areas could potentially lead to some extinction of plants and animals.
Some argue that wilderness areas to be preserved in order to keep their natural beauty but others want to develop them for economic gain. While preserving the areas would decrease animal and plant extinction, developing the areas would create an opportunity for monetary growth while also keeping its viewers safe. A compromise could be met where an area is creating economic growth while also preserving its wildlife.
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...n’s economy which can positively impact all of the nation’s residents. The wilderness are...
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... plant and animal life in these areas. When wilderness areas are developed in o...
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...ellowstone, and Yosemite, among others. These are very popular national parks th...
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...that create memories for many families. Not only if the wilderness areas in a na...
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... some extinction of plants and animals. Some argue that wilderness areas to be p...
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...wth while also preserving its wildlife.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233096085409 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.185053380783 0.157235817809 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0711743772242 0.0880659088768 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0604982206406 0.0497285424764 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0409252669039 0.0444667217837 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113879003559 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0533807829181 0.0406280797675 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44788402894 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0338078291815 0.030933414821 109% => OK
Particles: 0.00355871886121 0.0016655270985 214% => OK
Determiners: 0.103202846975 0.0997080785238 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0409252669039 0.0249443105267 164% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017793594306 0.0148568991511 120% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3121.0 2732.02544248 114% => OK
No of words: 527.0 452.878318584 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92220113852 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.297912713472 0.366273622748 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.225806451613 0.280924506359 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166982922201 0.200843997647 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106261859583 0.132149295362 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44788402894 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 219.290929204 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440227703985 0.48968727796 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.9420826046 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.9545454545 23.380412469 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9260094838 59.4972553346 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.863636364 141.124799967 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9545454545 23.380412469 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 46.5351906158 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.39751552795 1.64882698954 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246014150321 0.391690518653 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143681548592 0.123202303941 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.111647250476 0.077325440228 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515625608705 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0895157008142 0.149214159877 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971540324264 0.161403998019 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587456570666 0.0892212321368 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.379664948911 0.385218514788 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0511481448582 0.0692045440612 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175661797829 0.275328986314 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408181986677 0.0653680567796 62% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 7.22455752212 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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