Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
The author contends that appearance is becoming increasingly important in modern society and even surpasses the reality or truth behind it. My personal experience tells me that this is indeed the case sometimes, but I would argue that what is behind the appealing image could not be disregarded.
First of all, the important role of image is evident in many aspects. For example, in today’s business world. Take cellphones as an instance, since different brands of phones are more and more homogeneous in functional or structural aspects, companies have no choice but to differentiate themselves through image advertising, by conjuring up certain illusory benefits – such as status. And consider when we are in the supermarket, it is natural for us to choose those good-looking goods, presuming that they tend to be of higher quality.
The growing significance of image is also obvious in political realm, particularly when it comes to presidential politics. Admittedly, by its very nature politicking has always emphasized rhetoric and appearances above substance and fact. Yet since the invention of camera presidential politicians have become increasingly concerned about their image. After all, it was television that elected J.F.K. over Nixon. And our only two-term presidents in the television age were elected based largely on their image. Query whether Presidents Lincoln, Taft, or even F.D.R. would be elected today if pitted against the handsome leading man Reagan, or the suave and politically correct Clinton. After all, Lincoln was homely, Taft was obese, and F.D.R. was crippled.
The increasing focus on image is also palpable in job market. Surveys show that beautiful candidates are more likely to be recruited. As a result, some people do plastic surgery to improve their appearance and thus increase the possibility of being hired. Many people also get surgery because they want to be treated much better. Being beautiful is needed to be accepted by the society, especially for women, somehow.
However, although it is human nature to bias in favor of beauty and it is unblamable, it is not for the best of the society. Because in the long term, the significance of image wanes considerably. Imagine if a company hire a good-looking employee no appropriate ability to carry out the work. The company will have to either fire him and find another one, or allow him to stay and ultimately corrupt the company. Imagine if you buy a cake because of its pretty packaging, only to find it not tasty at all, will you buy it next time? More often than not, the answer will be no. And this could be applied to all cases. Ultimately, what determines the true value of a thing or a person is their quality, instead of image.
Therefore, there is no doubt that attracting appearance is important to some extent, but no one could afford to ignore the reality and truth behind it altogether.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, thus, after all, for example, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 319.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37931034483 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89368013013 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648902821317 0.4932671777 132% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.2143949268 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172521596457 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449758035123 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551039426167 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105407166184 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706503063771 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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