Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Under the competition pressure, most of the people achieve the best performance out of them, but not all people have sustainability of bare competitive pressure. Competitiveness has both sides, its beneficial in some areas and it's maybe crucial in some of the other areas.
In the early ages of childhood children have the ability to adopt thinks fast, basically, they can learn anything and everything in a few days with proper guidance. They don't think too much before doing anything. Human psychology says competitive nature comes by born. People love to get, what other people have the best in their life. For example, at the age of 10 all children like toys, if you say 1st standers students that whoever complete a certain task will get a prize. 9 out of 10 students will put their full efforts to meet given goals. Even if only one of them gets the prize but next time other students will try harder to complete the goals. We can see this behavior can help in any field of areas. In the sales team of every company have to maintain a certain level of competition to achieve monthly sales targets, this way both an employee and the company gets benefited.
On the other hand, children who get nurtured in a co-operative environment become a great leader. They are the ones who developed their own skills and be different in a group of people. They mostly have a co-operative mind with patience. They perform best in a new and difficult situation that never exist in past, they have the ability to find out the best creative solutions in any condition. Most of international sports teams player gets a lecture on being cooperative, how to handle and behave in critical match condition. In the company's customer care service executive have to be very co-operative to their customers unless they will never win customers loyalty.
Cooperative and competitive environment both are essential ingredients of life because in real-world not only with one environment you can be best in your field. You have to adopt a dynamic environment from your team to yourself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'achieve the best'.
Suggestion: achieve the best
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Suggestion: has
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Suggestion: some
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: students
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0059347181 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68400209622 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581602373887 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8260478954 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7894736842 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7368421053 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52631578947 7.06120827912 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181162221912 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583537530453 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504322414886 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111844809741 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025904840227 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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