Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Education has been always the essential factor every country have concerned about regarding economic and living basis enhancement. To provide a functional adolescent, while some people might think of creating a competitive environment for children as an initiative, others facilitate children’s learning by a co-operative method when it come to academic preference.
First of all, kids who are compelled to compete with each others tend to gain the best result they could. In term of being an utilitarian person, it seems good to preceed. But in the long term, students are gravitated towards the final outcome instead of deeper learning. Eventually, students are unable to broaden their horizon but only thinking about defeating the others, getting good marks. Furthermore, a competitive environment might make student become stressful and end up being a cheater in an examination room.
On the other hand, children benefit from co-operative learning are more likely to become a helpful adolescent. Co-operative learning require some sort of recreational skills such as giving an opinion, against one, raising a compliment or summarizing a task and so on. For instance, instead of saying “That is a horrible idea, I disagree with you”, children should be taught to say” I see your point, however, I think we should..”. In addition, team-work facilitates the learning process of children, expands their abilities and ideas in a certain topic when everyone in the group have the right to talk and be accepted.
In conclusion, while a competitive attitude should be promoted in some circumstance, I should lean towards creating a co-operative learning culture for children in school, which is vital importance in term of becoming a funtional adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: comes
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Suggestion: to require
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...e your point, however, I think we should..'. In addition, team-work facilitat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, regarding, so, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48717948718 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14222096245 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641025641026 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4236218959 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.833333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305903355255 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09614953763 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795744935096 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180651340681 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588578275913 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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