Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
A number of individuals think that parents would enroll their children in sports or music classes which are team oriented, while others think that parents should give their children the freedom to practice activities of their choosing. I personally believe that striking a balance between the two methods is what serves the children to best realize their potentials.
Those who lean towards organized group activities such as sports teams or music and singing choirs believe that it is the best way to teach young people discipline and cooperation. Discipline is very evident in group activities since they require periodic training sessions at predetermined times each week. Adhering to training timetables definitely helps the participant learn discipline and responsibility. In addition, being a member in a team teaches children how to work with others and cooperate in order to achieve a collective goal. Such traits are what encourages parents to enroll their children in group activities.
On the other hand, letting a child determine how their free time would be spent is equally important for some people. As they prefer that parents give their children the liberty to pick their own hobbies since that leads to being independent, and also builds character by allowing self-discovery. For instance, some young people like to solve puzzles or read mystery books and researchers found that these children are more likely to take interest in science and engineering careers. Not only that, but even if a child enjoys playing games or watching films it can be a form of relaxation for them. Hence some parents encourage their children to enjoy themselves however they like.
On balance, some prefer that parents make their children take part in team activities since it would be a valuable experience. Yet others prefer letting children decide how to spend their free time. However, I am of the opinion that a child would benefit from both approaches.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, while, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22151898734 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70451710188 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569620253165 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3688096481 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449564546519 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148588666192 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991722074921 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27326502276 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057275421881 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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