Are governments doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating?
In this modern day and age, developing healthy eating habits is critical due to the emergence of fast foods. The importance in this regard often leads to serious and controversial questions such as whether governments are doing a good job in terms of teaching people to monitor what they eat and if their intakes are nutritious enough. Although the answer to this question might differ from place to place and country to country, I utterly subscribe to the idea that governments are not playing their part in this regard overall. To support my point of view, there are several reasons, two of dominant which, are discussed in detail in the following.
First and foremost, in comparison to the past, young students are more predisposed to building unbalanced diets, and there is a growing body of opinion among health experts that the reason behind this lies in the fact that governments do not have any plan to educate young students, especially those who attend primary school. As a consequence, the children are becoming more and more susceptible to be influenced by food advertisements that are often try to make kids buy their products as the only thing most companies care about is not young children’s health but rather is their profit. Recent research conducted at the Sharif University of Technology yielded several interesting statistics one of which suggests that in the country of Iran, the amount of toxic intakes among children between five and ten increased fourfold over the course of the past decade. This clearly demonstrates how the government fails to come up with elaborately designed plans to raise children’s awareness regarding what they eat.
Furthermore, the rate at which adults are being diagnosed with serious physical and mental conditions is alarmingly on the rise. Nowadays, unfortunately, the hospitals are full of often young individuals who suffer from cardiovascular diseases and type one and two diabetes and this is merely because of the lack of presence of a healthy lifestyle, more precisely their eating habits. In fact, although there are organizations who try to broaden youth’s knowledge of the benefits of eating healthy, they usually neither have adequate influence, nor enormous funds to speak their voice. The only organizations with both financial and media resources capable of making impactful moves are governments. However, the statistics support the idea that governments do not have serious intentions to step up to the plate and solve this worldwide problem
To wrap it up, contemplating what was discussed above, I am of the strong conviction that governments do take appropriate steps to raise societies awareness on the advantages of eating healthy. This is because most young children have a severe disposition towards eating unhealthy foods and because young people are highly at risk of developing serious physical and mental conditions. Governments should snap into action as quickly as possible if they want this adverse trend to be reversed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23347107438 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85974521866 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553719008264 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5224730971 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.866666667 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2666666667 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173275758198 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054114111567 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490461798232 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111632502943 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323231124213 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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