Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities
By and large, it is of little debate in today’s sophisticated world that education is of great importance. This is inasmuch as education is the basic necessity of humans’ lives, and by education people can express their thoughts effortlessly. With this in mind, it is quite expected to notice some of its aspects are somewhat controversial due to its prominent standing; many people believe that if governments invest more money on young children’s education rather than on universities, their country will attain successful development. I personally concur with it. Among many reasons one can give for this opinion, two will be given and elaborated in the ensuing lines.
First of all, young children are those who can play influential role in making their society’s future. The more money governments invest in adolescents’ education, the more efficiently they can contribute to the community. Many are under the impression that if governments provide young children with useful education materials such as books, computers, internet, etc., students will be encouraged to study more efficaciously which make them more interested in higher education. Not only does this strategy have fruitful outcomes for children, but also it increases the country’s overall level of literacy in the long run.
Another interesting point which deserves some words here is that spending money on universities’ facilities without having any specialized technician is meaningless. Needless to say that building new campuses, new laboratories and libraries need a huge amount of money. Although these facilities are crucial for a university, they can be useful only if there is enough educated college students. If students study efficiently during their high school period, they will become educated students in college. This is possible only if government performs its duties with a fruitful manner.
To recapitulate, having analyzed the reasoning presented above, one can safely conclude that investing money in young children’s education has more reasonable outcomes rather than spending the same money on universities. This is owing to the fact that young children are responsible for the community’s future, and by spending money on their education, governments will benefit in the long run. Equipping universities with new facilities can be useful only if educated students are available.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, such as, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64931506849 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2542179278 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550684931507 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1972254064 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.294117647 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298149847555 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990002533649 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696497965438 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208208493646 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066140457948 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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