Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
By and large, it is of little debate in today’s sophisticated world that experience is of great importance. This is inasmuch as experience let people decide wisely in their future tasks. With this in mind, it is quite expected to notice some of its aspects are somewhat controversial due to its prominent standing; many people wonder what reaction they should have when they encounter with a success or a failure. Ideas often diverge here; while many think that they should be successful every time, others contend that keeping happiness even in failures is superior to the other choice. I personally consider myself among the latter group. Among many reasons one can give, two outstanding ones will be given and elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, every failure is the key to the next success. Many are under the impression that people can learn their mistakes in failures, and accomplish future task flawlessly. The more experience a person has, the more he or she will be success in the future. Those who only seek success will lose their confidence in an unpredicted situation. On the other hand, those who accept failures easily can start over many times with more experience. The second group seems more prosperous in their life. Take, for example, Thomas Edison. The inventor of lamps tried over 1000 times to find a suitable way to keep the bulb on, and finally he did.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people who find success the most paramount factor in their lives, are more vulnerable to mental problems. These people cannot tolerate difficulties comfortably. Therefore, in unpredicted conditions when they confront problems they easily lose their self-confidence and this may lead them to various mental problems. Conversely, people who are ready for defeat can concentrate more on further problems, and thus, can avoid such mental problems. Dealing with problems is impossible without mental health.
To recapitulate, having analyzed the reasoning presented above, one can safely conclude that maintaining happiness in failures has more advantages. This is owing to the fact that keeping happiness helps people find a more suitable solution for further problems. Moreover, people can avoid different mental problems if they learn experiences from each failure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (paramount) must be used with a third-person verb: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...ple who find success the most paramount factor in their lives, are more vulnerable to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, by and large, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24731182796 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69658897342 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572580645161 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9942504492 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7272727273 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269573559257 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691319031063 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547955836691 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156935790365 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427006957923 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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