Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
By and large, it is of little debate in today’s sophisticated era that technology is of great importance. This is inasmuch as technology has been improved significantly during the last century, and it has affected every aspect of humans’ lives. With this in mind, it is quite expected to notice some of its characteristics are some controversial due to its prominent standing; many people concern about the effects that technology may have on children. They believe that nowadays children spend too much time playing with electronic devices such as laptops and game consoles while playing outside with their friends or with their toys would be more beneficial for their development. I personally concur with it. Among many reasons one can give for this opinion, two will be given and elaborated in the ensuing lines.
First of all, by playing with their friends, children can improve their social skills. Many are under the impression that electronic devices have prevented people from participating in society. Social networks such as Facebook and Instagram are used extensively, and allow people to communicate effortlessly. Consequently, people, especially children, prefer to stay home and spend time on such networks. As a result, they cannot learn social skills, and this may have detrimental effects on their future life. If parents encourage their children to go outside, children can improve their social interactions by making new friends or participating in discussions.
Another interesting point which deserves some words here is that playing with physical simpler toys let children to be developed both physically and mentally. Needless to say that electronic devices make children stay fixed at a certain point for many hours, focusing on devices’ displays, which can harm their body both mentally and physically. Not only do going outside and playing high activity sports such as basketball, help children improve their body physically, but also they allow children to learn social skills, teamwork, discipline, time managing, etc. Moreover, simple toys are designed to improve children’s mental ability. Hence, by playing such toys children can improve their creativity and they will learn how to solve complicated problems.
To recapitulate, having analyzed the reasoning presented above, one can safely conclude that playing outside with friends or using simple toys may be beneficial for children’s ability in many ways. Such outside activities help children to improve their social skills, mental abilities and they can also improve their bodies’ physical strength. Generally, their advantages far outweigh their disadvantages. So, we can suggest that parents persuade their children to leave electronic devices and spend more time on other activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, while, such as, as a result, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5737704918 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94493856521 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529274004684 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5089345599 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262778435665 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087432732959 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836629476222 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189301243703 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621977000832 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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