Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the complexity of modern life, people deal with their hectic life and responsible for doing lots of activities in different areas. In this regard, some people believe young people have the ability to manage their works; however, others hold this viewpoint that it isn’t necessary for young children as they spend most of their time playing or going to school. Although this group of people has a strong tendency to their belief, I believe in the former group and think it is beneficial for young people to have an organized plan to manage their works. Accordingly, in what follows, I will try to provide some cogent reasons to support my statement.
By and large, when people have to plan and organize their activities, they can get their job done in the stipulated time frame. As a result, they are going to have less stress and tension for the rest of their daily life. By way of illustration, when I was going to university, I had a part-time job teaching undergraduate students. Those days I was under a lot of pressure since not only I had to do my assignments, but also, I had to teach students some difficult courses. Moreover, as I lived independently, I had to do some routine activities by myself such as cooking, washing dishes and so on. Therefore, I decided to organize my activities in order to do all of them on time. After a while, I felt relax and even I could find leisure time to do my favorite hobbies. For this reason, I strongly believe it is better for young people to have an organized plan to do all their activities in a defined deadline and alleviate their tension and feel much more relaxed.
The other equally important reason is that people encounter a lot of obstacles and problems which are hindered them from getting to their main goal. It is crystal clear that Young people also have various problems in different areas as well. Hence, it is necessary to have a practical plan and strategy to reach their goal. As a case in point, I can remember a time that I was trying to get a high score in my TOEFL exam, I faced lots of problem in my university that could simply divert me from my main goal. I had to finish my proposal at that time, whereas, my data collection couldn’t solve the main problem in my research. At first, I decided to study English only one hour a day that would be not enough for the TOEFL exam, but my supervisor suggests me to have a well-organized plan for each of my works. Since I have planned to get a high score in this exam and tried to go with my supervisor's suggestion by having a logical plan, not only could I solve my proposal problem, but also I could successfully pass my exam and got the best mark among my classmate. Had I not been planned for my life; I would have been disrupted and fail.
To wrap it up, though some may opposite this idea, when young people have organized people, it would be helpful for them. Not only can they do all their activities and feel less stress, but also they can go through their main goals without any disruption. All in all, it is suggested that teachers in school will try to teach children to design a well-organized plan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 431, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
... a high score in my TOEFL exam, I faced lots of problem in my university that could simply dive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.515625 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60199909792 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453125 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7022511057 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.086956522 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0434782609 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193575172793 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704590230135 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545711581764 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137641479712 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062547310993 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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