Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In today's progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of technology such as cell phones. In this regard, some people inclined toward the opinion that educating children is a more difficult duty today than before. On the other hand, others think new technology can help kids' in their education easily and effectively. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoints.
To begin with, children are engaged in various up to date technology such as cell phones, online games, and social networking web site which develop children's mental and intellectual abilities. In other words, when they work with social networks or play games, they are encouraged to learn how to adopt inventive methods to go through any problems or obstacles so facilitates their education process dramatically. For instance, five years ago, my little brother has been playing instructive online games, afterward, he has been learning how to think innovatively to find viable solutions to deal properly and efficiently with different problems and unprecedented challenges during these games. Therefore, the more children involve in technology, the more they develop mental and intellectual abilities.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that when children devote their time on cell phone, online games, and social networking, they can communicate and interact effectively with other kids for talks about the various topics about their lessons. To be more specific, when they encounter problems in their lessons, then they communicate with other friends in the virtual network. For example, when I was an elementary student, I had a problem with math and I sent a message to all of the friends so they expressed and shared their ideas freely and they help me to solutions my matters properly. Hence, if I had not update technology such as mobile, I could neither find new friends, nor resolve problems in my lessons.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that is new facilities more beneficial and conducive for kids to study. Not only do these items boost their mental and intellectual abilities, but they also solve their lessons problems by expand their relationship with other kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...es, online games, and social networking web site which develop childrens mental and inte...
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Line 6, column 506, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...oblem with math and I sent a message to all of the friends so they expressed and shared th...
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Line 6, column 644, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'updated'.
Suggestion: updated
...y matters properly. Hence, if I had not update technology such as mobile, I could neit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26873385013 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83256704979 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576227390181 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.688301478 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.933333333 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223545396267 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779128461933 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557335614739 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129311532283 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457243135359 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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