Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of opinion on whether the extended family members are not crucial in our daily lives like they used to be in the past. I do not agree with the given statement. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the next paragraphs.
First of all, extended family members are the ones who help us when some unpleasant thing happens in our lives. This is because it is easy the be understood by them since they know such aspects of our lives as; chronological disease, daily life struggles, accomplishments, and disappointments. Therefore, it is extremely easy to talk to them and request help. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was preparing for a language requirement exam, which was a must from the university that I was going to start a master, I could not succeed in my first attempt and therefore, I had to re-take the exam. But there was a pressing problem from my side, and that was financial matters: I did not have the money to pay. Since the exam itself is highly costly I did not want to ask my parents again for the exact amount of money. One day when I was on the phone with my grandmother, she understood from my voice that something was bothering me, after when I explained my situation, she immediately sent me money, even though I told her to not do so. Thanks to my grandmother I solved the money issue, and I booked another exam. It can be clearly seen from this experience that if my grandmother would not help me, I could not solve my problem as easily as I did.
Secondly, I think that due to the current advancements of technology it is pretty easy to communicate with loved ones. As the years go by family members may spread out to different cities, even to different countries and continents. Nevertheless, the technology breaks all the distance barriers. For instance, I have a WhatsApp chat group with my extended family members, and all of the individuals from both my mother's and my father's side are present in that chat group. The first Sunday of every month with a specific time, we do Skype and sometimes Zoom calls to catch up and know what is going on in our lives. If the extended family members do not represent importance like in the past days, I would not do these calls, instead, I would only call my parents. Therefore, I can say that all the people from my extended family are highly valuable and important in my life.
To conclude, even though some people think that nowadays the extended family is not that essential in our lives compared to the old times, I do not agree with them. I think these people are still crucially important in our lives when we need help and maintaining the relationship is not complicated although many of them live in a great distance, thanks to the technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n our lives. This is because it is easy the be understood by them since they know such...
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Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...up with my extended family members, and all of the individuals from both my mothers and my...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52766798419 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69331337693 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48023715415 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.655394661 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.136363636 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160681156488 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054508057498 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572756590738 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118887461636 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460738659524 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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