Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, the role of extended family in our lives is a common debate among people. In my opinion, the extended family is not essential, like the past. I will illustrate my main reasons.
Firstly, the peoples' connection is changing because of modern life. In modern life, people prefer to live separately, and most people emphasize on their privacy. They are looking for someone who has a common point of view with themselves. Also, social media plays a crucial role in our lives, and it creates a new shape for our families. We connect with other members of our families by social media, and it provides a new connection for us worldwide through the internet. Gradually, new people are replaced by our family, and we only connect with our parents. For example, I have not seen my cousins for a long time because I am an artist, and they are not resemblance to me, and I made new friends and went to a new country to start a new job.
Secondly, the extended family is a threat to the new lifestyle because it has many complex traditions that we must do it. It determines many rules for us and limits our lives. Actually, it is annoying. Nowadays, the extended family is not as important as the past because the extended family tries to intervene in the peoples' lives, but they do not like it. They like to decide for their lives in contrast to the past that grandparents were deciding for them, and it was hateful. For instance, I remember that my friend did not want to be a doctor, but their family is forcing him to do that. Actually, he loves art and wanted to go to an art university. His grandfather was a famous doctor who made that decision. After some years, he left his job because he did not like it, and he was suffering from dejection.
In sum, the extended family is not as important as the past because modern life does not allow it to intervene in our lives and determine what we should do or what we should not do. Also, most people are sensitive about their privacy in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in contrast, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49326145553 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52777309282 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477088948787 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.668048447 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.380952381 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162451231372 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507514383523 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612155215531 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111750465903 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440860677069 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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