Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Family is the holiest and fundamental thing that everyone has. We love our grandparents, aunts, uncles, and all of our relatives. Since we were a child, we went to their home's especially on specific days like Christmas. We got together and had a nice time with each other. There is an opinion now a day the extended family is less important than it was in the past. Some people, including me, accept this opinion. In this essay, I am going to explain three potential reasons to convince you.
First of all, many years ago most of the family was in the same town and lived near each other, but now everyone lives in different cities even countries and continents. As people live far from their relatives their connection weakened and debilitated than before. For example, my aunts and grandparents lived in the same vicinity and we lived in another city. When we traveled there, I always was happy because I could see them and they were near to each other. while now they separated and scattered all over the world that I have to spend 1 week to see just one of them.
Secondly, as the lifestyle changed quickly and everyone has to adapt to this type of life, many things altered. After the industry and technology revolution, our lives are much busier than lives in the past. With the limited time, we can't concern much about the extended family since we are more occupied with jobs or close family issues. For instance, in the past, we just scheduled an appointment to visit them, but now everyone has to check if anyone is busy or not. They just can't schedule a time that they would all be available.
Finally, the last thing I want to say and it has a huge influence on this type of connection is the change in adults and teenagers. Most young people like to spend time with their friends rather than their family members. Visiting grandparents is necessary and is a sign of respect, but young people hardly have fun with them. On the contrary, being with friends of the same age is so funny and enjoyable. So, this is not surprising that youth do not like to spend time with extended family members often.
In short, although we still regard our extended relatives as an important part of our lives, the distance between the families, and a faster pace of individual lives, and behavioral change in youth have caused them to be less important compared to the past.
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... spend 1 week to see just one of them. Secondly, as the lifestyle changed quick...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, as to, for example, for instance, in short, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59669811321 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42890980464 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516509433962 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1112334538 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7391304348 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225959217855 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644445320896 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815638468023 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125364928917 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252735567413 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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