Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should spend more money on improving access to the Internet than on public transportation
Internet is one demand of advanced life of today which facilitates life in many ways. But if it is going to be compared with public transportation system, I believe the second one has a more important role. In my opinion, more money should be spend spent on public transportation than on improving access to the Internet. My chief factor is that the public transportation system which is available now is not efficient. My second reason relates to the role of public transportation in reducing air pollution.
Firstly, in many big cities the biggest problem is traffic. Many people spend hours a day in traffic jams in order to get to their offices, universities or schools. This means that a great deal of time is wasted just in the way to get to work. The main reason of traffic in big cities is lack of efficient public transportation system which makes people use their own vehicle. Efficient public transportation means a system which people can be sure that they can get wherever they want on time and also that they are comfortable in the vehicle. In my city for example, not only are not the busses buses and underground trains on time, but also they are very crowded. The government should advocate allocate a budget to improve the quality of travelling by both busses buses and underground tubes.
Second, the crucial aim of public transportation is to reduce the air pollution which is made by cars. Every car releases a great quantity of gases which are harmful to the environment. This These gases damage the ozone layer and cause ozone depletion in near future and also make global climate change in far future. This These hazardous changes can be prevented by using fewer cars. Government should provide a kind of public transportation in the city which encourages people to travel by public vehicles. For example, in Tehran the routes of underground train is not coveringdoes not cover the western parts of the city. As a result, people who want to travel there mostly choose to drive. So there is usually traffic in that part, which makes the air polluted.
To sum up, I have no doubt that the government should spend more money on public transportation than on improving access to the Internet because the public transportation system needs to be more efficient and also has a crucial role in reducing air pollution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
...le. In my opinion, more money should be spend spent on public transportation than on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, so, for example, kind of, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83582089552 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77967015563 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462686567164 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6363093535 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5714285714 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267795359785 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820111712967 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12456498603 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212885325211 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135803399036 0.0645574589148 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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