Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s turbulent economic environment, it is difficult for countries to decide which areas they should spend money on. Some people believe that it is important to fund the arts, while others feel that it is preferable to prioritize athletics issues. In my opinion, funding the arts is more important than supporting the athletics. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be explored in the following essay.
To begin with, sponsoring arts means more ordinary people have the chance to savor the beauty of different kinds of artworks. For instance, if government could invest more money to help musicians hold more concerts and reduce the ticket prices, then more people would become willing to listen to music in a concert hall instead of watching TV in their houses. The spell of music would not only make people more peaceful, civilized and polite, it also helps them release the stresses of their daily lives, refreshing their minds to meet new challenges.
Moreover, while funding sports seems a good idea, it is entirely possible for athletic and sport programs to be privately funded. Many businesses and individuals are willing to make donations to athletes in exchange for promotional considerations. Many sport teams can get famous sponsors due to the fact that their matches broadcasts from the media. Not only that, but the Internet has made it possible for athletes to fund their work through online social networking sites. For instance, there is a community sport team in my hometown which recently lost a significant portion of its public funding following recent budget cuts by the municipal government. While the situation looked dire at first, the team was able to attract financial support from companies who wished to have their logo displayed on the sport team matches. In addition, the group looked to the Internet and raised money from individual donors who were happy to help their favorite team. This example demonstrates some of the methods that sport teams can use to attract funding to replace government support. In contrast, art activities can not get famous sponsors and raise fund using such methods.
However, it should also be noted that if the government spent more money in sponsoring in athletics, it might bring people a sense of honor when the athletes win the first titles in the Olympic Games, but this has little to do with people's daily life. Therefore, the advantages of spending more money in sponsoring arts still outweigh investing in athletics.
In conclusion, I feel that if the government is forced to make a choice, it should choose to fund arts rather than sports. I feel this way because it offers people more opportunities to appreciate artworks and because sports can often be privately funded.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07592190889 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60428205937 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537960954447 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.904982633 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.65 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265465748828 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827444570195 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591293508094 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144565067395 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510651137938 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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