Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Since the beginning of time, human beings have always attempted to improve their living standards and bring more convenience to their day-to-day life. Throughout history, art has played a fundamental role in all countries and societies. Sport is very important too, and athletes are the champions and pride of a country but art, on the other hand, art is a history of a nation and we should value this important. artists are the voice of their country and need more attention. so, in my opinion, due to lots of advantages that art has for everyone, governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics. In this essay, I am going to explain my reasons for supporting my idea.
First of all, there is enough support for sport and athletes, either the state-sponsored Olympic teams and private-sponsored Olympic teams. But when we look at arts and artists, we do not see an adequate budget spend on it. In our country, there are hundreds and more private companies which want to support the national football team, but none of them have been supported any kind of art yet. In order to make up for this discrimination between arts and sports, it is fair that the government now spends more money in support of the arts, since private companies are eager to support athletics.
Secondly, I think the extension of art will affect a whole societies' spirit and decrease bad behaviors like violence. According to my observation, people who are related to any kind of art are very sensitive. In our life, we usually recognized that artists can affect others in good ways with their great behaviors and morals. For instance, I had an experience in my life. When I started learning and going to piano class, everyone told me that I changed a lot in a good way, I realized it on my own too. I used to get angry and nervous very easily but after being in touch with the piano, I became a calm and more relaxed person.
To sum up, as I mentioned above, I do not want to underestimate the value of the sport, but the sport gained its own place and deserved value in our country, so it is time the government to pay much attention to arts and spend more money on it than in support of sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, as for, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58186397985 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65771603038 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528967254408 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6140912397 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339833144716 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981254397136 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984462953667 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204251823535 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103470718484 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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