Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Without a shadow of a doubt, governments' investments in assorted activities play a pivotal role in their enhancement. An unanswered question in this area is which field should governments focus on and devote their subsidies to. Despite all the arguments asserting that supporting arts due to its close engagement with humans' nature is of great importance, I believe otherwise, maintaining that sponsoring athletics has tremendous implications on both people's attitudes and dominant lifestyle. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, proponing athletics, especially in cosmopolitan competitions such as Olympics, attracts adolescents' attention to physical activities and sports. In other words, supporting athletes and their teams heighten their potency in competitions and helps them take a leap forward in overcoming their opponents. As a result, people, singularly juveniles, become fascinated by sports while watching their national teams win various contests and prompt them to accommodate professional activities in their routines. My friend's experience is an excellent example of this. I remember ten years ago, Iran's wrestling team was being supported by our governments' financial aids, which resulted in a multitude of triumphs in worldwide competitions. Afterwardr, there was a surge for registering boys in wrestling classes, with the hope that their children would find a way to Olympic and ace. Furthermore, the more sports became appealing to young people, the less a society confronted hazardous diseases that stemmed from immobility. To put it more simply, this vast demand for doing physical activities will form people's mindsets and attitudes toward activeness and a healthier lifestyle.
Another reason worthwhile mentioning is that in the given hectic life, in which people are invariably working from dawn to dusk, hearing good news about their national athletes' accomplishments can relieve their tiredness and mitigate their anxiety levels. As a matter of fact, people will be proud of their country seeing its teams' supremacy, and a sense of nationalism will be spread all over the among all. On the other hand, supporting arts may help raise crafty artists and works such as gorgeous paintings, yet, it is merely associated with a minority of people passionate about art. My personal example is a comprehensive instance of this circumstance. I remember a night which my dad was weary of his work, and it coincided with Iran's football match with Spain. This match was held in a period in which our football team was substantially supported. Finally, after watching our team winning, my dad totally forgot his mental concerns as if he was not tired before it. As it is evident, these kinds of pleasures can spontaneously diffuse a positive vibe in a country.
Reflecting upon all reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that devoting money to sports exerts effective influences on societies in a myriad of facets. Not only does it encourage people to start professional sports and prevent possible diseases such as obesity, but it also makes a country happier.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, while, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44308943089 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02622278164 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603658536585 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4381599352 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.727272727 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170386256256 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427653907844 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410688036705 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977281283241 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387516757754 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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