Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to succeed in study or job, the ability to adjust or adapt to changing conduction or circumstance is more important than having excellent knowledge.
Chasing success is regarded as one of the most important goals by students and workers, and they have come up with many vital factors helping them make it. Nowadays a new discussion over whether the ability to adjust to various environments or liberal knowledge are more essential. In my opinion, people who can change themselves according to the atmosphere are easier to fulfill their goals.
Firstly, students can get higher scores in important exams if they can adapt to rules from their school and teachers. For most students, the prior goal is to perform well in tests. To do so, they need to follow the instruction of their teachers and schools who are familiar with relevant exams. To be more specific, their teachers realize what type of questions are more important, what kind of knowledge can be neglected, which are difficult for students to predict even though they acquire enough knowledge. For instance, in my last year of senior high school, many of my classmates chosen to leave school and prepare for the final examination on their own because they had studied hard for three years, so they believed they could do better themselves. However, for rest of us in the classroom, our teacher had emphasized every important detail of the examination and we have changed our answering habits according to our teacher, which helped us go to better universities.
Meanwhile, adjusting to circumstances are important for officers to earn more money. For many officers, their daily work does not demand professional skills, meaning that their extraordinary knowledge can be useless. What they should focus on is the change of their company and their bosses. For example, my uncle has been working as an officer in the government. In last summer, his boss retired and came a new one. My uncle searched for his information and tried his best to be familiar with new boss’s working style, which impressed the boss deeply. And my uncle was promoted as the vise president to assist the boss. Adjusting themselves to earn the trust of their bosses is more important than learning various of knowledge blindly.
In conclusion, for both students and workers, adjusting themselves to the changing circumstance is much more important than learning some knowledge that could be useless, for this ability can help them get higher score and earn more money efficiently.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0612244898 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6867707354 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540816326531 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5472316875 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.222222222 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179303521483 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628599875868 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608570701416 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133112392028 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362359954606 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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