Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Most people agree that everyone in the world should make rational decisions based on present facts. Personally, I believe that nowadays young people are better able to make decisions about their own life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in the past few decades, technology has been progressing very rapidly. This has caused rapid changes in lifestyle of the society and caused lots of opportunities such as jobs to appear. Such changes happened so fast that parents did not have enough time to adapt, as a result they may not make good decisions. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. At the time my father was young, higher educational degrees meant better job opportunities, higher social status and higher salary. But as the time passed these privileges that came with higher degrees faded and having a high university degree was not as advantageous as before, as a result a few years ago my father suggested was to study PHD. He supported his suggestion by claiming the advantages that such degrees had in the past, which don't exist anymore. After consulting with other people who had PHD i was made sure that getting in is a huge waste of time. Therefore, I did not go with what my father said. My father's opinion was not wrong back then when he was my age, but it is not a good opinion now.
Further mode, anyone especially young people should be able to Think independently and gain experience by making mistakes. For instance, when I was a few years younger I was too dependent on my parent’s decision making, as a result I did not choose my major in university based on what I really liked but rather based on my parent’s opinion. and now that I have finished university, I regret my decision because I hate my job. had I thought independently back then, I could have my dream job now.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that young people should decide on their own. This is because the solutions and choices that were good in the past may not be ideal for now, and young people should learn to think independently and not rely on others' opinions too much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64829396325 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60479877938 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530183727034 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1807980097 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2105263158 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0526315789 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266188344222 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894519807609 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109867726152 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215632867556 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122517651226 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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