Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Most people agree it is important not to express your personal life to the public. Personally, I believe that It is best if other people have as little information as possible about one’s personal life. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, if one wants to record his or her personal experiences, he or she can do it in a private way like recording them on a note book or a personal computer that other people do not have access to. By showing one's personal data to public, some untrustworthy people can make use of that information and cause harm. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. when I was young one of such sites was recently introduced and some people took a liking to it. Some of them even used it 24 hours a day. My neighbors where one of these people. They used record all of their personal life and put it on that site, including the hours in which they were home and hours in which they were not. One night burglars made use of this information and broke into their home when they were not there and stole all of their jewelry and precious stuff. From that day forward they did not dare to use social-network sites. Had they been more careful with their personal data such tragedy would not have happened for them.
Furthermore, putting personal data open to the public will not benefit people in any way, on the contrary it might also negatively effect one's future carrier. For instance, when I was young, I had a friend who was very active on such websites. One day he posted a bad joke. Because he was inexperienced and young, he did not notice what he has done. Years later when he became a candidate for mayor position, his rivals used that joke against him and as a result he got defeated in a competition which he could have won easily.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that it is not a good idea to put personal experience and pictures in social-network sites. This is because some people might abuse this information and try no take advantage of them, and it might destroy your future job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
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Message: Consider replacing "in a private way" with adverb for "private"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rsonal experiences, he or she can do it in a private way like recording them on a note book or a...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49214659686 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5238045981 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515706806283 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6202745595 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214295538543 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635156351347 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525900484958 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127405443422 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671652757138 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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