Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations. Use details and examples to support your answer.
A lot of research based studies have come up recently which support the notion fo people spending a lot of their time on hobbies for realxation purposes. People these days tend to emphasize greatly on mental health and spend time enjoying what they do rather than what they should. A lot of controversy revolves around whether time should be wisely allocated or shopuld people just go on with the flow. Well, if I were to chose between two sides, I would definitely say that people must focus more on their hobies than slaying on a mundane routine for days. A precise explanation is developed in the upcoming passages.
To start with, people should really do things that they enjoy in order to reap the benefits of their work. However, it is important to note that we are discussing about productive work being a hobby, and not just some random time killing stuff. For example, a lot of children these days keep glued to their cell phones and waste a lot of time over there. I shall not consider such a thing as a hobby. In contrast, a hobby is sometime which helps in the personal development of an individual and gives him intrinsic pleasures. Drawing from my own example, I must say that a hobby has helped me manifold times in my life. I have recently developed a hobby of practising music during my free time. It has given me a lot of room for contemplation and guided me to find inner peace. Good mental health has a positive spill over effect in other aspects of life. Ever since I have alloted time to music, I have notice a substantial improvement in productivity. My grades have instantly gone up and I have been able to consistently concentrate for longer periods of time.
Secondly, it is a well perceived notion that people excel in things that they do. If a person pursues a career of his choice- something that he enjoys doing, he is bound to reach the zenith in that particular field. Say for example, a person it really interested in finance such that he treats it as a hobby,. During his free time he inspects financial accounts of large firms, analyzes data and draws inference from them. Although he is not doing something that he should be doing, say for example studying for his upcoming exams, but he is deifnitely strengthenig his skillset. He is spending time on personal enjoyment and broadening his porftfolio of information as well. In future, he might consider opting for a career in finance and then the time spent on his hobby shall prove to be beneficial in crafting his life.
Finally, a well developed hobby may turn out to be an impetus for an ambitious future through exploration of a hidden talet. Without much ado, I shall straight away put a personal example from my personal life. During my childhood days, I used to play a lot of chess. I was absolutely fascinated by the intricacies of the game and loved spending time on it. Surely a huge proportion of time spent of it meant lesser time spent on things of priority- for example, studies and homework. However, those times helped me improve my cognitive abilities and sharpen my visualization skills. Not to mention, I grew up to be a very strong player, represented my country in international events and made a living out of it. As a matter of fact, I even got a sports scholarship from a top franked university which supported me to complete my graduation.
To conclude, people must devote a good amount of time on their hobbies-doing things they like. By doing so, they would not only be able to gain greater mental stability, but also find a right balance of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to manifold' or 'manifold'.
Suggestion: to manifold; manifold
..., I must say that a hobby has helped me manifold times in my life. I have recently devel...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...inance such that he treats it as a hobby,. During his free time he inspects financ...
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Line 5, column 677, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the future'?
Suggestion: In the future
... his porftfolio of information as well. In future, he might consider opting for a career ...
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Line 7, column 749, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...f it. As a matter of fact, I even got a sports scholarship from a top franked universi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in contrast, as a matter of fact, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2941.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 634.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63880126183 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01790360848 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66781357088 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 315.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496845425868 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0919714748 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.1212121212 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2121212121 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24242424242 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202919168471 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560404439509 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439711959471 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122349778105 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284251842114 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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